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People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parent’s bring them up.To what extent do you agree and disagree?

People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parent’s bring them up. rwbN
Behind the success of anyone there is someone who have guided or helped to reach at current position. Getting success is not easy it require hardwork and dedication toward single goal. I agree with the given statement that parenting contribute to their child’s success by inculcating good virtues and providing right environment to grow their children in any direction. To begin with, Good moral values is the one of the quality of highly successful person. Moral values, children are inherit from their parents as they spends more time with parents. Values such as honesty, adjusting and helping mentality, truthful and respect to others are the backbone for success. These values support them in their journey to success as these values help to take right decision in difficult situation. For example, Famous actor Amitabh bachhan had mentioned during his interview that his father’s passion towards poetry, motivated him to work for passion rather then the money in initial days of struggle. Furthermore, Surrounding in which children are grown up, affects them mentally and emotionally. Parents provide the loving, caring and friendly environment to their children which ultimately enable children to share their ups and down with their parents without being hesitate. Parents can know their children and can guide them in right direction. Parents choose and pay for their children’s school. All these aspect of children’s life is very crucial to build great mentality and strong emotion. For instance, Popular cricketer Sachin Tedulkar was failed in his metric, Instead of scolding his father encouraged him to play cricket and provided all support to become member of India team. To conclude, Parents who provide an encouraging environment and good virtues to their children in their childhood are always praised on their the success of their child’s in adulthood because they have mould their child to fit in success.
Behind the
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of anyone there is someone who have guided or
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helped
to reach at
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current
position. Getting
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success
is not easy it
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require
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hardwork
and dedication toward single goal. I
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agree
with the
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given
statement that parenting contribute to their child’s
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success
by inculcating
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good
virtues and providing right environment to grow their
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children
in any direction.

To
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begin
with,
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Good
moral values is the one of the quality of
highly
successful person. Moral values,
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children
are
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inherit
from their
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parents
as they
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spends
more time with
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parents
. Values such as honesty, adjusting and helping mentality, truthful and respect to others are the backbone for
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success
. These values support them in their journey to
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success
as these values
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help
to take right decision in difficult situation.
For example
,
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Famous
actor
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Amitabh
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bachhan
had mentioned during his interview that his father’s passion towards poetry, motivated him to work for passion
rather
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then
the money in initial days of struggle.

Furthermore
, Surrounding in which
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children
are grown
up, affects them mentally and
emotionally
.
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Parents
provide the loving, caring and friendly environment to their
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children
which
ultimately
enable
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children
to share their ups and down with their
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parents
without being
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hesitate
.
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Parents
can know their
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children
and can guide them in right direction.
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Parents
choose and pay for their
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children’s
school. All
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these aspect
of
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children’s
life is
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very
crucial to build great mentality and strong emotion.
For instance
, Popular cricketer
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Sachin
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Tedulkar
was failed
in his metric,
Instead
of scolding his father encouraged him to play cricket and provided all support to become member of India team.

To conclude
,
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Parents
who provide an encouraging environment and
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good
virtues to their
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children
in their childhood are always praised on their the
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success
of their child’s in adulthood
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because
they have
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mould
their child to fit in
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success
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IELTS essay People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parent’s bring them up.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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