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People say it is the responsibility of the residents to keep the environment clean and tidy while others think it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion with examples. v.1

People say it is the responsibility of the residents to keep the environment clean and tidy while others think it is the government's responsibility. v. 1
Many people agree that it is the duty of tenants to keep their surroundings neat and habitable, while others believe that caring for the environment is the government’s responsibility. In my opinion, Keeping the environment clean is very crucial. People generally ought always to be involved in the sanitation of their surroundings, irrespective of who’s responsibility it is. To begin with, the environment plays a significant role when health is involved. Tenants who are health conscious should take the initiative to keep their environment clean. Most especially, people who have children that are prone to environmental diseases. Indeed, children are the most affected group in terms of sicknesses caused by lack of proper sanitation of the environment. The more reason why it should be the responsibility of residents to cater to their environment to prevent themselves and their families from detrimental health issues. In South Africa, for instance, residents of the Nelson Mandela estate are now in charge of their environment, keeping it clean and tidy. No little wonder the estate is the most habitable in the country. Similarly, the government has a huge responsibility in terms of keeping the environment clean. Because, people pay a lot of tax to the government, it is expected that the government should be responsible for the environment. Moreover, people cannot be blamed for depending on the government for a clean environment. If people are committed to paying tax, shouldn’t the government be fully committed to the environment? If the government wants to avoid increase in environmental pollution, shouldn’t the duty of cleaning the environment be kept solely in their hands? For example, Lagos, a metropolitan city in Nigeria already has an environmental agency, LAWMA, fully funded by tax which is responsible for keeping the environment neat and tidy. To conclude, sanitation of the environment can not be overemphasized and it is everyone’s responsibility. Each person has a role to play in keeping it habitable. This would go a long way in creating a sustainable dwelling place.
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keep
their surroundings neat and habitable, while others believe that caring for the
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environment
is the
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government’s
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responsibility
. In my opinion, Keeping the
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environment
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clean
is
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responsibility
it is.

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environment
plays a significant role when health
is involved
. Tenants who are health conscious should take the initiative to
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keep
their
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environment
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clean
. Most
especially
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people
who have children that are prone to environmental diseases.
Indeed
, children are the most
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affected
group in terms of sicknesses caused by lack of proper sanitation of the
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environment
. The more reason why it should be the
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responsibility
of residents to cater to their
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environment
to
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prevent
themselves and their families from detrimental health issues. In South Africa,
for instance
, residents of the Nelson Mandela estate are
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now
in charge of their
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environment
, keeping it
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clean
and tidy. No
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little
wonder the estate is the most habitable in the country.

Similarly
, the
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government
has a huge
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responsibility
in terms of keeping the
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environment
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clean
.
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people
pay
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tax to the
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government
, it is
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should be responsible for the
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.
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,
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cannot
be blamed
for depending on the
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government
for a
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clean
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environment
. If
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people
are committed
to paying tax, shouldn’t the
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government
be
fully
committed to the
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environment
? If the
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government
wants to avoid increase in environmental pollution, shouldn’t the duty of cleaning the
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environment
be
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kept
solely
in their hands?
For example
, Lagos, a metropolitan city in Nigeria already has an environmental agency,
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LAWMA
,
fully
funded by tax which is responsible for keeping the
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environment
neat and tidy.

To conclude
, sanitation of the
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environment
can not
be overemphasized
and it is everyone’s
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responsibility
. Each person has a role to play in keeping it habitable. This would go a long way in creating a sustainable dwelling place.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People say it is the responsibility of the residents to keep the environment clean and tidy while others think it is the government's responsibility. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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