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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v.12

People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v. 12
Adapting the local cultural customs always gives a friendly environment. Some people argue that if someone relocated to a new place, then they should adapt the local community customs and their regulations. I completely agree with that adaptive nature of frequent travellers across the globe. People think that, when they travelled to new places irrespective of their nature of job, existing community policies. They should allow and follow the local region principles, and other mandatory rules. Since they do not have the option to opt out those customs it’s even harder to follow diligently without breaking them at any cost. This sort of polices are there, since from the inception and complicated to obligate them otherwise they have the fear of castigation since they are non locals. Despite the complicated regulations and regulation there were predominantly two immense benefits to follow them. Firstly, people will become more friendly by experiencing those rules and participating in certain events. Apparently the people, part of that community will have quintessential life style. Secondly, for the individuals, it will be like improving their adaptable nature across the cultural groups. Ultimately, in the future if they would like to interact with diverse local habitats and any in case, if they would like to relocate to different places, at that moment also it will significantly helpful to them and with a tiny amount of time only they can able to mingle with regional people. To conclude, not only adaptability skills but also they will be jubilant more in terms of their local cultural events. Irrespective of the local language, regions, and a variety of people by allowing the circumstances of their places, people will accountable with their happy life.
Adapting the
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cultural customs always gives a friendly environment.
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Some
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people
argue that if someone relocated to a new
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, then they should adapt the
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community customs and their regulations. I completely
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agree
with that adaptive nature of frequent
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travellers
across the globe.

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People
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that, when they travelled to new
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places
irrespective of their nature of job, existing community policies. They should
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allow
and follow the
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region principles, and other mandatory
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rules
.
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Since
they do not have the option to opt out those customs it’s even harder to follow
diligently
without breaking them at any cost. This sort of polices are there, since from the inception and complicated to obligate them
otherwise
they have the fear of castigation since they are non locals.

Despite the complicated regulations and regulation there were
predominantly
two immense benefits to follow them.
Firstly
,
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people
will become more friendly by experiencing those
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rules
and participating in certain
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events
.
Apparently
the
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people
, part of that community will have quintessential life style.
Secondly
, for the individuals, it will be like improving their adaptable nature across the cultural groups.
Ultimately
, in the future if they would like to interact with diverse
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local
habitats and any in case, if they would like to relocate to
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different
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places
, at that moment
also
it will
significantly
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only
they
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can able to
mingle with regional
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people
.

To conclude
, not
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adaptability
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skills
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but
also
they will be jubilant more in terms of their
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local
cultural
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events
. Irrespective of the
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local
language, regions, and a variety of
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people
by allowing the circumstances of their
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places
,
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people
will accountable with their happy life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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