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People living in large cites today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? v.1

People living in large cites today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? v. 1
n recent years, there have been a number of everyday problems that people in big cities have to cope with. This essay will discuss two major problems, pollution and information overload, which I believe should lead governments to encourage people to move to regional areas. These days, increased levels of pollution have been a great cause for concern among residents of the big cities. Due to high volumes of traffic, large quantities of pollutants are being released into the atmosphere, causing the degradation of air quality, which is said to be a significant contributor to various types of respiratory disease, such as lung cancer. Additionally, people in big cities are being bombarded with too much information from the media, including TV, social media, and advertising, with a large proportion of this information being fake or exaggerated. This can lead to confusion or, in some cases, social anarchy. In my opinion, governments should do what they can to encourage city residents to move to regional areas. Firstly, it will reduce the number of vehicles in cities, which will definitely reduce the levels of air pollution, which is hazardous to the health of citizens. Furthermore, fewer people living in big cities will relieve the pressure on the housing supply, where many people are forced to live in small, uncomfortable spaces. Studies have shown that people’s living spaces have a direct impact on their mental health and how they perform at work. In conclusion, severe air pollution and a bombardment of information are among the most serious problems facing city residents nowadays, and personally, I feel that authorities should encourage people to relocate to other areas to live.
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pollution
and
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overload, which I believe should lead
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governments
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people
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move
to regional areas.

These days, increased levels of
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pollution
have been a great cause for concern among residents of the
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big
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cities
. Due to high volumes of traffic, large quantities of pollutants are
being released
into the atmosphere, causing the degradation of air quality, which
is said
to be a significant contributor to various types of respiratory disease, such as lung cancer.
Additionally
,
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people
in
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big
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cities
are
being bombarded
with too much
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information
from the media, including TV, social media, and advertising, with a large proportion of this
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information
being fake or exaggerated. This can lead to confusion or, in
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some
cases, social anarchy.

In my opinion,
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governments
should do what they can to encourage city residents to
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move
to regional areas.
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, it will
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reduce
the number of vehicles in
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cities
, which will definitely
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reduce
the levels of air
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pollution
, which is hazardous to the health of citizens.
Furthermore
, fewer
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people
living in
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big
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cities
will relieve the pressure on the housing supply, where
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many
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people
are forced
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, uncomfortable spaces. Studies have shown that
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people’s
living spaces have a direct impact on their mental health and how they perform at work.

In conclusion
, severe air
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pollution
and a bombardment of
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information
are among the most serious problems facing city residents nowadays, and
personally
, I feel that authorities should encourage
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people
to relocate to other areas to
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live
.
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IELTS essay People living in large cites today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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