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People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v.9

People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v. 9
Advancement of technology has created different modes of communication, where spoken one can be done through video calling and mobile phones, and the written communications through emails, texting, and chatting. In my view, the choice of communication to be used should be made depending upon the type of information to be delivered. First and foremost, all the formal information should be conveyed through written methods. For instance, a letter of job offer along with all the terms and conditions of contract should be in the written mode as it will be considered more authentic and legally accepted. Secondly, written form can be used by shy people to convey their messages and express their thoughts. To illustrate, in some circumstances, an article published in the newspaper or a book written can deliver messages with longer lasting impression than a spoken speech. Thirdly, this method of conveying messages is helpful among the nations having the diversity of the population and different accents to understand the language accurately. Contrarily, spoken form should be preferred in the informal messages because it is more related to expressing the feelings and facial expressions. For example, this mode should be always used by the family and friends as it will further help to strengthen the bond and harmony. To recapitulate, I opine that written communication is the best mode among transferring the formal information so mostly used in the professional fields, and spoken is preferred among families to deliver our feelings and emotions in the more elaborate ways.
Advancement of technology has created
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different
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modes
of
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communication
, where spoken one can
be done
through video calling and mobile phones, and the
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written
communications through emails, texting, and chatting. In my view, the choice of
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communication
to be
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used
should
be made
depending upon the type of information to
be delivered
.

First
and foremost, all the formal information should
be conveyed
through
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written
methods.
For instance
, a letter of job offer along with all the terms and conditions of contract should be in the
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written
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mode
as it will
be considered
more authentic and
legally
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accepted
.
Secondly
,
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written
form can be
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used
by shy
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people
to convey their
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messages
and express their thoughts. To illustrate, in
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some
circumstances, an article published in the newspaper or a book
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written
can deliver
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messages
with longer lasting impression than a spoken speech.
Thirdly
, this method of conveying
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messages
is helpful among the nations having the diversity of the population and
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different
accents to understand the language
accurately
.

Contrarily
, spoken form should
be preferred
in the informal
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messages
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because
it is more related to expressing the feelings and facial expressions.
For example
, this
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mode
should be always
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used
by the family and friends as it will
further
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help
to strengthen the bond and harmony.

To recapitulate, I opine that
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written
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communication
is the best
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mode
among transferring the formal information
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so
mostly
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used
in the professional fields, and spoken
is preferred
among families to deliver our feelings and emotions in the more elaborate ways.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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