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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still do not take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment? v.6

People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still do not take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment? v. 6
Nature is a gift of god to human mankind and it is the responsibility of every human being to take care of it. In additions, global warming and air pollution are frequently headlines on TV along with newspapers or magazines all over the world, which always keep remind us to be under the obligation to protect the environment. Nevertheless, it seems that people are generally unconscious of what they have done to the environment. This essay will discuss some reasons of this problem and recommend some productive solutions to it. First and foremost, there is plethora of factors that people do not take responsibility to safeguard the environment. It is often argued that overpopulation is the main cause of this problem when individuals are more likely to cut down a great number of trees and forests to utilize that land to construct house and do farm or haunt and trade animals for a living. All these actions definitely will disrupt the natural balance and lead to global warming and landslides which can cause adverse damage to both people and properties. Besides that, more and more industrial zones accompanied by factories etcetera have been built with the aim of meeting the demand of extending population. As a consequence, an enormous amount of exhausted fumes along with carbon footprint is dumped directly into the environment which is the chief reason of green house gas emission. Therefore, the government has to take proactive measures to make people more environmentally responsible. Initially, the local areas should hold workshops, campaigns or organizations with a view to boost individuals’ understanding about these hot issues so that they can be more aware of their actions by means of consuming more green products as an alternative to disposable goods that can do harm to the environment. Furthermore, I highly recommend that it would be much better for vehicle manufactures to design more environmentally friendly transports or cars and planes powered by renewable resources. Last but not least, imposing a strict restriction on the untreated waste dumped to the environment no less than severe punishment on those who have made our environment get worse and worse. In summaries, there is always a dilemma between saving our planet from becoming an uninhabitable place and worldwide development. However, people can do something to diminish the negative effect of human activities on the environment.
Nature is a gift of god to human mankind and it is the responsibility of every human being to take care of it. In additions, global warming and air pollution are
frequently
headlines on TV along with newspapers or magazines all over the world, which always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
remind us to be under the obligation to protect the
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environment
.
Nevertheless
, it seems that
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people
are
generally
unconscious of what they have done to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. This essay will discuss
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some
reasons of this problem and recommend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
productive solutions to it.

First
and foremost, there is plethora of factors that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not take responsibility to safeguard the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
argued that overpopulation is the main cause of this problem when individuals are more likely to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down a great number of trees and forests to utilize that land to construct
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and do farm or haunt and trade animals for a living. All these actions definitely will disrupt the natural balance and lead to global warming and landslides which can cause adverse damage to both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and properties.
Besides
that, more and more industrial zones accompanied by factories etcetera have
been built
with the aim of meeting the demand of extending population. As a consequence, an enormous amount of exhausted fumes along with carbon footprint
is dumped
directly
into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
which is the chief reason of green
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
gas emission.

Therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
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has to
take proactive measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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people
more
environmentally
responsible.
Initially
, the local areas should hold workshops, campaigns or organizations with a view to boost individuals’ understanding about these hot issues
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can be more aware of their actions by means of consuming more green products as an alternative to disposable
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goods
that can do harm to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
Furthermore
, I
highly
recommend that it would be much better for vehicle manufactures to design more
environmentally
friendly transports or cars and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
planes
powered by renewable resources. Last
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but
not least, imposing a strict restriction on the untreated waste dumped to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
no less than severe punishment on those who have made our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
worse and worse.

In summaries, there is always a dilemma between saving our planet from becoming an uninhabitable place and worldwide development.
However
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can do something to diminish the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect of human activities on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still do not take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
392 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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