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People face greater risks today than in the past because of the modern way of life

People face greater risks today than in the past because of the modern way of life 7aQen

It is fact, the world today is undeniably becoming fast-tracked, more competitive and stressful. People face problems daily in their life and it turns more challenging to cope up with this competitive world. Therefore, I agree with this statement that in modern life people face risk than in past days. First of all, looking at it from the development of the world, it is getting harder to make a career for adults and study for young people. Such as employees are expected to do more work as compared to previous days to secure a decent job. They may work overtime most of the working days also for making happy to the boss. On the other side, younger people who are studying in institutions, are also facing problems with their education. They have to go ahead in academic achievement with extracurricular activity so that they can be found at the top position. Secondly, our environment is becoming worse with every passing day, and without awareness among ordinary citizens, it will become impossible to achieve environmental protection. We are constantly contributing to global warming, pollution, and climate change. Thirdly, because of advanced technology, nowadays, crime is getting increased also. That makes it so available to make money for involving in a crime. The opponents of this view believe that the past is old. But the modern days are worse. The living style was more relaxing and Although people were healthy and fit. Also, it was a secure and friendly environment for all. Overall, an increase in pressure and technology will give us benefit for today, but it can't give you happiness and pleasure for the next few years, due to the worst-case scenario.

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today
 is undeniably
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-This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
tracked
, more competitive and stressful. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 face problems daily in their life and it turns more challenging Did you mean "coping"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.coping
to cope
 up with this competitive world. Therefore
, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with this statement that in modern life You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 face This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :hazarddanger
risk
 than in past days.

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First of all
, looking at it from the development of the world, it is getting harder to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a career for adults and study for young You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
. Such as employees are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipated
expected
 to do more work as compared to previous days to secure a decent job. They may work overtime most of the working days also
 for making happy to the boss. On the other side, younger You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 who are studying in institutions, are also
 facing problems with their education. They This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 go ahead in academic achievement with extracurricular activity This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that they can be found
 at the top position.

Secondly
, our environment is becoming worse with every passing day, and without awareness among ordinary citizens, it will become impossible to achieve environmental protection. We are constantly
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change
.

Thirdly
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because
 of advanced technology, nowadays, crime is getting increased also
. That This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
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make
 money for involving in a crime.

The opponents of this view believe that the past is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 the modern days are worse. The living style was more relaxing and Although You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 were healthy and fit. Also
, it was a secure and friendly environment for all.

Overall
, an increase in pressure and technology will give us benefit for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it can't give you happiness and pleasure for the next
 few years, due to the worst-case scenario. 