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people debt for buying this they cant afford

people debt for buying this they cant afford eMVp
People are these days focusing manily on the pride of having financial outlooks. Resuming from the morning to the end of the day they are living in a differt mindsets. The way of thinking is enhancing more on one, s own circumstances. So, everyone started buying luxurious things and gadgets for debt rather than thinking of their own financial background. This passion of luxurious outlook is playing an important role in one's life. Reasons to such behaviour -Judging the financial status of a person through the things he/she use- is the most way people choose to judge these days. -Everyone is just hardly trying for the ways and reasons to make them stand out rich. -Inorder, to maintain relation with rich is also a good reason where people are buying things that they cant afford. Actions that can prevent people from behaving like this - May include in the changes of society's way of thinking -Their estimation of one's financial status should be based on the family's income but not just on the things people use. -Self confidence and self esteem with what we have is the powerful weapon one should wear in the society. -Friendly relationships should be based on the attitude and personal behaviour of a person rather than on the way they look and the way they wear. This prospective of living is strictly hitting the changes of one's livelihood. I can summerize this through a situation now people are involved into is using a gadget above their financial status and debting just to wear rich looks.
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are these days focusing
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manily
on the pride of having
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financial
outlooks. Resuming from the morning to the
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end
of the day they are living in a
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differt
mindsets. The way of thinking is enhancing more on one, s
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own
circumstances.
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So
, everyone
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started
buying luxurious things and gadgets for debt
rather
than thinking of their
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own
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financial
background. This passion of luxurious outlook is playing an
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important
role in one's life.

Reasons to such
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behaviour


-Judging the
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financial
status of a person through the things he/she
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use
- is the most way
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people
choose to judge these days.

-Everyone is
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just
hardly trying for the ways and reasons to
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make
them stand out rich.

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-Inorder
, to maintain relation with rich is
also
a
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good
reason where
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people
are buying things that they
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cant
afford.

Actions that can
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people
from behaving like this

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May include in the
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changes
of society's way of thinking

-Their estimation of one's
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financial
status should
be based
on the family's income
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but
not
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just
on the things
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people
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use
.

-Self confidence and
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self esteem
with what we have is the powerful weapon one should wear in the society.

-Friendly relationships should
be based
on the attitude and personal
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behaviour
of a person
rather
than on the way they look and the way they wear.

This prospective of living is
strictly
hitting the
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changes
of one's livelihood. I can
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summerize
this through a situation
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now
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people
are involved
into is using a gadget above their
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financial
status and
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debting
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just
to wear rich looks.
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IELTS essay people debt for buying this they cant afford

Essay
  American English
11 paragraphs
260 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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