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One side is of the opinion that art is an inborn quality and others feel that artists are created by hard work and practice. Nobody can deny the fact that practice makes a man perfect, however in some exceptional cases a person might just be blessed with certain qualities.

One side is of the opinion that art is an inborn quality and others feel that artists are created by hard work and practice. Nobody can deny the fact that practice makes a man perfect, however in some exceptional cases a person might just be blessed with certain qualities. BA66
In today’s fast paced and competitive world everyone is on their own. The next step for university students after graduating is to move out in the real world and have real connections. While some might put forward the idea that focussing on other activities will lead to lack of attention on studies, I believe that it is crucial for students to step out. The 21st century is the era of competition and capitalism, money is of high importance. Signing up to a part time job will help the students to get out of their comfort zone. Economically, this will help students with high study loans. Joining an internship or a workshop proves to be of great help, the reason for this is that they will learn a number of life skills like discipline, time management and have plenty of experiences and lessons to gain from it, which will be useful when they graduate. Hence, giving a kickstart to their careers already. Several activities might help students to build connections in the society, making them more responsible and efficient. Meeting people who work in the same field as their study would help them get more insights on the job market. Learning how to interact in the professional world is a skill university students should be trained in, as they are the future workforce. Being stuck in a room with books and assignments for the majority of time can have detrimental effects on a student’s mental and physiological health. Taking up a hobby or a sports activity can be extremely beneficial for them. The contrasting arguments would be that students might lose focus in their students leading to late submissions and a lower grade. I believe that involving oneself in other activities would automatically teach a person on how to manage their time. Afterall, failing teaches a lot of lessons. To put it all together, practical experiences can be much more useful to students rather than living in their shell and just having bookish knowledge.
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paced and competitive world everyone is on their
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own
. The
next
step for university
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students
after graduating is to
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move
out in the real world and have real connections. While
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some
might put forward the
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idea
that focussing on other
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activities
will lead to lack of attention on studies, I believe that it is crucial for
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students
to step out.

The 21st century is the era of competition and capitalism, money is of high importance.

Signing up to a part
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time
job will
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help
the
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students
to
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get
out of their comfort zone.
Economically
, this will
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help
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students
with high study loans. Joining an internship or a workshop proves to be of great
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help
,
the reason for this is
that they will learn a number of life
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skills
like discipline,
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time
management and have
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plenty
of experiences and lessons to gain from it, which will be useful when they graduate.
Hence
, giving a
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kickstart
to their careers already.

Several
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activities
might
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help
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students
to build connections in the society, making them more responsible and efficient. Meeting
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people
who work in the same field as their study would
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help
them
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get
more insights on the job market. Learning how to interact in the professional world is a
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skill
university
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students
should
be trained
in, as they are the future workforce.
Being stuck
in a room with books and assignments for the majority of
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time
can have detrimental effects on a
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student’s
mental and physiological health. Taking up a hobby or a sports
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activity
can be
extremely
beneficial for them.

The contrasting arguments would be that
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students
might lose
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focus in
their
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students
leading to late submissions and a lower grade. I believe that involving oneself in other
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activities
would
automatically
teach a person on how to manage their
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time
.
Did you mean "after all"?
Afterall
, failing teaches
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a lot of
lessons.

To put it all together, practical experiences can be much more useful to
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students
rather
than living in their shell and
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just
having bookish knowledge.
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IELTS essay One side is of the opinion that art is an inborn quality and others feel that artists are created by hard work and practice. Nobody can deny the fact that practice makes a man perfect, however in some exceptional cases a person might just be blessed with certain qualities.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
333 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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