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People can prepare various types of foods easily and in less time nowadays. What contributed to this improvement and has this development changed the way we live? v.3

People can prepare various types of foods easily and in less time nowadays. What contributed to this improvement and has this development changed the way we live? v. 3
The cooking has become much simple nowadays. Clearly, it is an art of creativity. I believe, it may be because of the changing food habits and technological advancement in the society. People adapts to the new changes very easily nowadays. In other words, it can be said as moving lifestyle. In these circumstances, people are in a busy working schedule and they cannot manage the old cooking system like smoky wooden stoves. Also, there is no space as well as time to spend on it. As a result of this people go behind the easy cooking recipes or instant food available in the market, even the children opt for burgers or pizza. Next, the technological advancement plays a major role in the kitchen. Traditional olden days kitchen are getting totally replaced by the modern kitchens and its equipment with all the facilities like mixer grinder, microwave oven, gas stoves etc. With the use of those, preparation of foods is becoming easier and also time saving. In the future, as a result of new innovations, cooking robots may be introduced to lessen the work more than we think. Definitely, the technological innovation and improvement have made the process of cooking and preparing food easier and that has positively impacted people’s lives. More women now work outside and they can prepare foods after getting back from office. People can spend more time with family members and friends because the cooking needs less time than it used to take. The ready food, improved tools for cooking, easy access to recipes are all beneficial for people as they allow us to spend less time cooking. In short, this gives so many benefits, at the same time we should look into our health also for the ill effects.
The cooking has become much simple nowadays.
Clearly
, it is an art of creativity. I believe, it may be
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because
of the changing
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food
habits and technological advancement in the society.

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People
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adapts
to the new
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changes
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very
easily
nowadays.
In other words
, it can
be said
as moving lifestyle. In these circumstances,
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people
are in a busy working
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schedule and
they cannot manage the
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old
cooking system like smoky wooden stoves.
Also
, there is no space
as well
as
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time
to spend on it.
As a result
of this
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people
go behind the easy cooking recipes or instant
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food
available in the market, even the children opt for burgers or pizza.

Next
, the technological advancement plays a major role in the kitchen. Traditional olden
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days
kitchen are getting
totally
replaced by the modern kitchens and its equipment with all the facilities like mixer grinder, microwave oven, gas stoves etc. With the
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use
of those, preparation of
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foods
is becoming easier and
also
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time
saving.

In the future,
as a result
of new innovations, cooking robots may
be introduced
to lessen the work more than we
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think
. Definitely, the technological innovation and improvement have made the process of cooking and preparing
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food
easier and that has
positively
impacted
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people’s
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lives
. More women
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now
work
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outside and
they can prepare
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foods
after getting back from office.
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People
can spend more
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time
with family members and friends
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because
the cooking needs less
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time
than it
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used
to take. The ready
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food
,
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improved
tools for cooking, easy access to recipes are all beneficial for
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people
as they
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allow
us to spend less
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time
cooking.

In short, this gives
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so
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many
benefits, at the same
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time
we should look into our health
also
for the ill effects.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay People can prepare various types of foods easily and in less time nowadays. What contributed to this improvement and has this development changed the way we live? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
293 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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