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People attend graduate courses for different reasons. Why do you think people attend graduate courses. Provide reasons and appropriate examples to support your reasons v.1

People attend graduate courses for different reasons. Why do you think people attend graduate courses. Provide reasons and appropriate examples to support your reasons v. 1
Water inadequacy has always been a world- wide issue since a very long time, and it is significant to take required measures to mitigate the intensity of the water famine. It is caused because over usage ad wastage of water. This easement will explain about different problems caused by the water shortage and the solutions for the same. According to the global economic forum, water scarcity is an essential issue which should be taken into consideration, the problems caused by it are on a very humongous rate. Water inadequacy is caused because of the mismatch of the demand and the supply of fresh water to consume. As the population of a world increases the demand for the fresh water would increase and non-availability of the fresh water would lead to serious health hazards. Secondly, it would affect the agricultural system, as fresh water is used for farming and cultivating the crops, scarcity would lead to crop fails. Another effect of scarcity would be draughts. According to a study, draughts have been reported to be one of his reasons for deaths in a country. In India, at least, 5 percent of the population of Rajasthan dies because of draughts. How can we resolve the issue? We have a plethora of initiatives to be taken in decreasing the intensity of the fresh water shortage. Firstly, we need to focus on the long-term solutions such as, taking steps on preserving the world from global warming and the climate changes. Then comes, strategies to be taken by the governments to preserve the water by introducing different schemes for collecting the fresh and useable water, and by constructing dams or other reservoirs. At an individual level, we can perform rainwater harvesting for collecting the water and treating the water accordingly to reuse it later and we should also check upon the water usage and wastage level. By following small measures and solution we have preserved and use the water. To conclude, water shortage has become one of the biggest problems in the world and we need to preserve and save it by initiating minimal strategies. And we need to protect the resources on the planet.
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Water
inadequacy has always been a
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world-
wide issue since a
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very
long time, and it is significant to take required measures to mitigate the intensity of the
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water
famine. It is
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caused
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because
over usage ad wastage of
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water
. This easement will
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explain
about
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different
problems
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caused
by the
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water
shortage and the solutions for the same.

According to the global economic forum,
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water
scarcity is an essential issue which should
be taken
into consideration, the problems
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caused
by it are on a
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very
humongous rate.
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Water
inadequacy is
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caused
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because
of the mismatch of the demand and the supply of
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fresh
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water
to consume. As the population of a
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world
increases the demand for the
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fresh
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water
would increase and non-availability of the
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fresh
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water
would lead to serious health hazards.
Secondly
, it would affect the agricultural system, as
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fresh
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water
is
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used
for farming and cultivating the crops, scarcity would lead to crop fails. Another effect of scarcity would be
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draughts
. According to a study,
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draughts
have
been reported
to be one of his reasons for deaths in a country. In India, at least, 5 percent of the population of Rajasthan
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dies
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because
of
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draughts
.

How can we resolve the issue? We have a plethora of initiatives to
be taken
in decreasing the intensity of the
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fresh
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water
shortage.
Firstly
, we need to focus on the long-term solutions such as, taking steps on preserving the
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world
from global warming and the climate
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changes
. Then
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comes
, strategies to
be taken
by the
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governments
to preserve the
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water
by introducing
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different
schemes for collecting the
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fresh
and useable
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water
, and by constructing dams or other reservoirs. At an individual level, we can perform rainwater harvesting for collecting the
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water
and treating the
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water
accordingly
to reuse it
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later and
we should
also
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check
upon the
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water
usage and wastage level. By following
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small
measures and solution we have preserved and
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use
the water.

To conclude
,
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water
shortage has become one of the biggest problems in the
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world and
we need to preserve and save it by initiating minimal strategies. And we need to protect the resources on the planet.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People attend graduate courses for different reasons. Why do you think people attend graduate courses. Provide reasons and appropriate examples to support your reasons v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
360 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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