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People are never satisfied and always want more. In what ways is this a good thing and in what ways is this a bad thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

People are never satisfied and always want more. In what ways is this a good thing and in what ways is this a bad thing? v. 3
Success always motivates a person. Many people around the world are not satisfied with their achievements. That is why they are always in a race to get more and more. Whether it is a good phenomenon or not, this essay will discuss the issue. To begin with, without having a never satisfied nature, new opportunities are not possible to find out. For example, Alexander Graham Bell was very famous for his new inventions, but he was never satisfied with it. As a result, he later invented the telephone. Similarly, Christopher Columbus had become successful to discover America for his restless nature. As he was high in spirits, it became possible for him to find a new place around the world. Moreover, due to wide range of competition, everyone is in a race to prove themselves better and perfect. However, people with unsatisfied nature sometimes fail to make up his mind to fix his target. This leads to the way of mental dissatisfaction. The great warrior Alexander is a good example to take into consideration. Although he had won half of the world, he was not ready to stop. As a result, he died in the middle of the war without enjoying the fruit of his achievements. Dissatisfied person could be harmful for the society because he always tries to achieve many things at any cost, so social unrest might be break out in some cases. In conclusion, unsatisfied nature has both positive and negative sides. If never satisfied nature is for new discoveries that could be considered as acceptable, otherwise this human trait should be changed.
Success always motivates a person.
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around the world are not
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get
more and more. Whether it is a
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phenomenon or not, this essay will discuss the issue.

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with, without having a never
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,
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opportunities are not possible to find out.
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very
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he was never
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satisfied
with it.
As a result
, he later invented the telephone.
Similarly
, Christopher Columbus had become successful to discover America for his restless
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nature
. As he was high in spirits, it became possible for him to find a
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new
place around the world.
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, due to wide range of competition, everyone is in a race to prove themselves better and perfect.

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nature
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fail to
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his target. This leads to the way of mental dissatisfaction. The great warrior Alexander is a
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example to take into consideration. Although he had won half of the world, he was not ready to
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in the middle of the war without enjoying the fruit of his achievements. Dissatisfied person could be harmful for the society
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he always tries to achieve
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things at any cost,
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social unrest might be break out in
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has both
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positive
and
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sides. If never
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satisfied
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is for
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new
discoveries that could
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changed
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay People are never satisfied and always want more. In what ways is this a good thing and in what ways is this a bad thing? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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