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People are living more. Should the government provide education and healthcare for free for all society ?

People are living more. Should the government provide education and healthcare for free for all society? 73LM2
MEDICAL CARE OVER THE PAST CENTURY HAS IMPROVED DRAMATICALLY. AS A CONSEQUENCE, THE WORLD’S POPULATION IS INCREASINGLY LIVING LONGER INTO OLD AGE. IS THIS HAVING A HARMFUL EFFECT ON SOCIETIES ACROSS THE GLOBE, OR ARE THERE MORE BENEFITS THAN DRAWBACKS? ONE OBVIOUS ISSUE WITH AN AGEING POPULATION IS THAT IT CAN CREATE ENOURMOUS DEMANDS ON A NATIONS HEALTH SERVICE. AS PEOPLE LIVE LONGER INTO THEIR OLD AGE, THE CHANCES OF THEM SUFFERING FROM SERIOUS ILLNESS INCREASES. AS A RESULT, THE LIKEHOOD OF THEM REQUIRING MEDICAL TREATMENT BECOMES HIGHER, AND IT BECOMES MORE DIFFICULT TO PROVIDE CARE FOR EVERYONE. A FURTHER DOWNSIDE IS THAT LIVING LONGER DOES NOT NECESSARILY BRING HAPPINESS. BY THIS I MEAN, AN OLDER PERSON IS UNABLE TO DO MANY OF ACTIVITIES THAT THEY WANTO TO DO, LEADING TO THE LIKEHOOD OF DEPRESSION AND A DETERIORATION IN THEIR PHYSICAL HEALTH. HAVING SAID THAT, YOUNG PEOPLE CAN BENEFIT FOR A LONGER IS THAT YOUNG PEOPLE CAN BENEFIT FOR A LONGER TIME FROM THE WISDOM HANDED DOWN TO THEM BY OLDER MEMBERS OF THEIR FAMILIES. IN TODAY’S FAST-PACED WORLD, IT IS OFTEN COMFORTING TO SEEK ADVICE FROM OLDER GENERATIONS. CONSEQUENTELY, THE PHYSICAL HEALTH OF A GRANDPARENT IS ALMOST IRRELEVANT, AS THE CHILDREN WILL BENEFIT FROM THE EXPERIENCE OF AN OLDER MIND. WHAT IS MORE, RETIRED PEOPLE TODAY ARE GENERALLY MUCH HEALTHIER THAN THEY HAVE EVER BEEN, AND OFTEN ENJOY THEIR LIVES MORE THAN THEY DID WHEN THEY WERE YOUNG. THEY HAVE THE BEST OF BOTH WORLDS – FAMILY THAT CAN CARE FOR AND LOOK UP TO THEM, AND BETTER HEALTH THAN AT ANY TIME IN HUMAN HISTORY. WEIGHING UP BOTH SIDES OF THE ARGUMENT AGAIN, ALTHOUGH THERE ARE A NUMBER OF PROBLEMS THAT OLD AGE BRINGS – PREDOMINANTLY HEALTH-RELATED- BRINGS THE BENEFITS THAT T BRINGS TO THE FAMILY UNIT AND TO SOCIETY AS A WHOLE ARE IMPOSSIPLE.
MEDICAL CARE OVER THE PAST CENTURY HAS
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IMPROVED
DRAMATICALLY
. AS A CONSEQUENCE, THE WORLD’S POPULATION IS
INCREASINGLY
LIVING
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LONGER
INTO
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OLD
AGE. IS THIS HAVING A HARMFUL EFFECT ON SOCIETIES ACROSS THE GLOBE, OR ARE THERE MORE
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BENEFITS
THAN DRAWBACKS?

ONE OBVIOUS ISSUE WITH AN
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AGEING
POPULATION IS THAT IT CAN CREATE
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ENOURMOUS
DEMANDS ON A NATIONS HEALTH SERVICE. AS
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PEOPLE
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LIVE
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LONGER
INTO THEIR
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AGE, THE CHANCES OF THEM SUFFERING FROM SERIOUS ILLNESS INCREASES.
AS A RESULT
, THE
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LIKEHOOD
OF THEM REQUIRING MEDICAL TREATMENT BECOMES HIGHER, AND IT BECOMES MORE DIFFICULT TO PROVIDE CARE FOR EVERYONE. A
FURTHER
DOWNSIDE IS THAT LIVING
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LONGER
DOES NOT
NECESSARILY
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BRING
HAPPINESS. BY THIS I MEAN, AN
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OLDER
PERSON IS UNABLE TO DO
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MANY
OF ACTIVITIES THAT THEY
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WANTO
TO DO, LEADING TO THE
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LIKEHOOD
OF DEPRESSION AND A DETERIORATION IN THEIR PHYSICAL HEALTH.

HAVING SAID THAT, YOUNG
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PEOPLE
CAN
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BENEFIT
FOR A
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LONGER
IS THAT YOUNG
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PEOPLE
CAN
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BENEFIT
FOR A
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TIME FROM THE WISDOM HANDED DOWN TO THEM BY
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OLDER
MEMBERS OF THEIR FAMILIES. IN
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’S
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FAST
-PACED WORLD, IT IS
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OFTEN
COMFORTING TO SEEK ADVICE FROM
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OLDER
GENERATIONS.
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CONSEQUENTELY
, THE PHYSICAL HEALTH OF A GRANDPARENT IS ALMOST IRRELEVANT, AS THE CHILDREN WILL
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BENEFIT
FROM THE EXPERIENCE OF AN
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MIND.
WHAT IS MORE
, RETIRED
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PEOPLE
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TODAY
ARE
GENERALLY
MUCH HEALTHIER THAN THEY HAVE EVER BEEN, AND
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OFTEN
ENJOY THEIR
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LIVES
MORE THAN THEY DID WHEN THEY WERE YOUNG. THEY HAVE THE BEST OF BOTH WORLDS
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FAMILY THAT CAN CARE FOR AND LOOK UP TO THEM, AND BETTER HEALTH THAN AT ANY TIME IN HUMAN HISTORY.

WEIGHING UP BOTH SIDES OF THE ARGUMENT AGAIN, ALTHOUGH THERE ARE A NUMBER OF PROBLEMS THAT
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OLD
AGE
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PREDOMINANTLY
HEALTH-RELATED-
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BRINGS
THE
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BENEFITS
THAT T
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BRINGS
TO THE FAMILY UNIT AND TO SOCIETY AS A WHOLE ARE
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IMPOSSIPLE
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IELTS essay People are living more. Should the government provide education and healthcare for free for all society?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
5.5
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