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How well do you know the people who live next door to you How often do you see them Why Why not What kinds of problem do people sometimes have with their neighbours v.1

How well do you know the people who live next door to you How often do you see them Why Why not What kinds of problem do people sometimes have with their neighbours v. 1
Many persons strongly believe that, to measure the intelligence of a person, the best tool is success. On the other hand, some people feel that there are various other modes to check the intelligence of a person. I firmly believe that, intelligence could be observed through the reaction of a person in situations, with their popularity among people and many other ways. Firstly, in the world, many people are relishing the height of success not because of their own skills and intelligence, but because of their parent’s hard work. For example, everyone knows Mukesh Ambani, because of his smart move to do the business. Thus he earned everything because of his own hard work, but what about his other family members, they got success because of his intelligence. It depicts, successful people are not always intelligent and hard working. Secondly, every day is a new day, people are learning from every moment. The person, who is handling a worse situation with their own intelligence, gets famous and starts earning through his popularity among society. People are well famous because of their controversies too, and getting more work, but it does not mean they are intelligent, for instance, Shehnaz Gill, she participated in Big Boss 13, because of her controversial, she is getting huge success and money and that is only because of her behaviour, not because of her intelligence. In conclusion, people who are intelligent, it does not mean they are successful as people who are dumb could be richer. I will say, intelligent people are able to win the heart of people and can impress others; they could be judged through their popularity, nature, body language not only from their bank accounts.
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay How well do you know the people who live next door to you How often do you see them Why Why not What kinds of problem do people sometimes have with their neighbours v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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