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Parents should have no control over the lives of their children once they turn 16.

Parents should have no control over the lives of their children once they turn 16. G980o
Every parent wants their children to develop a sense of independence, responsibility, and respect, so they always pay attention to all mental and physical development and changes whether they are small or even reach the age of adolescence. This essay agrees that parents play a significant part in the lives of their children once they turn 16 because they need to be considerate, educated and guided during the challenging teenage years. Firstly, the psychological and cognitive changes among adolescents make them more bad-tempered and sensitive to their surroundings. This is a time of changes for how teenagers think, feel, and interact with others, and how their bodies grow(“Teenagers (15-17 years of age)”). They are easily in a huff even when it is just a little issue. They seem to feel being annoyed and even come to controversies considered as teenage rebellion. Adolescents who were securely attached to one or both parents reported significantly more positive and fewer negative interactions with their parents than did teens who were insecurely attached to both parents(Ducharme). Simultaneously, they tend to pay more attention to their body changes and the assessment of others. They might feel a lot of sadness or depression, which can lead to poor grades at school, alcohol or drug use, unsafe sex, and other problem(“Teenagers (15-17 years of age)”). Hence, parents play a significant role in easing teenagers' concerns and helping them overwhelm the most difficult time. Secondly, At this stage, teenager's inadequate cognitive thinking has a considerable influence on their impulsive actions and careless decisions. It is a period of biological, cognitive and social change of such magnitude and rapidity that it is no surprise to find that it is associated with the onset or exacerbation of a number of health-related problems including depression, eating disorders, substance abuse and dependence, risky sexual behaviour, antisocial and delinquent activity and school dropout(Moretti). They are of interest to explore everything and expand social relationships, which poses a challenge for them to better choose between a wide range of good and bad things. Generally, teenagers are likely to show more independence and self-esteem. However, they are also susceptible to bad impacts that always exist and attract their curiosity such as drugs, alcohol, insecure sex, etc. Parent’s guidance provides them more knowledge to better self-protect and be aware of those things than ignorance and no control. Those on the other side of the issue may say that parents should give children some space to experience their life and self-decide their issues instead of excessively controlling their lives once they are 16. Their actions or decisions may well be right or wrong, which makes a memorable youth. In “Want to control your teens? Don’t, ” Dr. John Grohol, Psy. D. , pointed out that efforts to over-control a teen could be counterproductive and ultimately reinforce the exact behaviors they were trying to control (often sexually-oriented behaviors). As a result, the controversy between parents and children tends to increase and cause unexpected conflicts and misunderstandings and it can affect children's perceptions and behaviors. They can even become violent, negative, and easy to lose temperature due to pressure. For this reason, opponents claim that parents need to let their children choose their lives as they get into adolescence. Nevertheless, no one can deny that the love and affection offered by a parent is not something that can be replaced by a peer, counselor or anyone else and that is why parents should still be able to control the lives of their children even after the age of 16(“Parents Have No Right To Control The Lives Of Children Above 16, ” 2019). It is important to remember that adolescents need their parents not only to set appropriate expectations and boundaries, but also to advocate for them(Torres). In summary, this essay draws the fact that irrespective of some debates, parents should monitor and associate themselves with their teenagers to run their lives. Teenagers should know that they still need their parents even if they are not of the same opinion.
Every
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wants their
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to develop a sense of independence, responsibility, and respect,
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they always pay attention to all mental and physical development and
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changes
whether they are
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or even reach the
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of adolescence. This essay
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agrees
that
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parents
play a significant part in the
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lives
of their
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children
once they turn 16
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they
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need
to be considerate, educated and guided during the challenging teenage years.

Firstly
, the psychological and cognitive
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changes
among adolescents
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make
them more
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bad
-tempered and sensitive to their surroundings. This is a time of
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changes
for how
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teenagers
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think
, feel, and interact with others, and how their bodies grow(“
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Teenagers
(15-17 years of
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age)”)
. They are
easily
in a huff even when it is
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just
a
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little
issue. They seem to feel
being annoyed
and even
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come
to controversies considered as teenage rebellion. Adolescents who were
securely
attached to one or both
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parents
reported
significantly
more
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positive
and fewer
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negative
interactions with their
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parents
than did teens who were
insecurely
attached to both parents(
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Ducharme
).
Simultaneously
, they tend to pay more attention to their body
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changes
and the assessment of others. They might feel
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a lot of
sadness or depression, which can lead to poor grades at school, alcohol or drug
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use
, unsafe sex, and
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other
problem(“
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Teenagers
(15-17 years of
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age)”)
.
Hence
,
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parents
play a significant role in easing
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teenagers
' concerns and helping them overwhelm the most difficult time.

Secondly
, At this stage,
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teenager
's inadequate cognitive thinking has a considerable influence on their impulsive actions and careless decisions. It is a period of biological, cognitive and social
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change
of such magnitude and rapidity that it is no surprise to find that it
is associated
with the onset or exacerbation of a number of health-related problems including depression, eating disorders, substance abuse and dependence, risky sexual
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behaviour
, antisocial and delinquent activity and school dropout(
Possible spelling mistake found.
Moretti
). They are of interest to explore everything and expand social relationships, which poses a challenge for them to better choose between a wide range of
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good
and
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bad
things.
Generally
,
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teenagers
are likely to
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show
more independence and self-esteem.
However
, they are
also
susceptible to
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bad
impacts that always exist and attract their curiosity such as drugs, alcohol, insecure sex, etc.
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Parent’s
guidance provides them more knowledge to better self-protect and be aware of those things than ignorance and no control.

Those on the
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other
side of the issue may say that
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parents
should give
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children
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some
space to experience their life and self-decide their issues
instead
of
excessively
controlling their
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lives
once they are 16. Their actions or decisions may well be right or
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wrong
, which
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makes
a memorable youth. In “Want to
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control
your teens? Don’t,
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”
Dr. John
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Grohol
,
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Psy
. D.
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,
pointed out that efforts to over-control a teen could be counterproductive and
ultimately
reinforce the exact behaviors they were trying to
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control
(
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often
sexually
-oriented behaviors).
As a result
, the controversy between
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parents
and
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children
tends to increase and cause unexpected conflicts and misunderstandings and it can affect children's perceptions and behaviors. They can even become violent,
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negative
, and easy to lose temperature due to pressure.
For this reason
, opponents claim that
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parents
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need
to
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let
their
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children
choose their
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lives
as they
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get
into adolescence.
Nevertheless
, no one can deny that the
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love
and affection offered by a
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parent
is not something that can
be replaced
by a peer, counselor or anyone else and
that is
why
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parents
should
still
be able to
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control
the
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lives
of their
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children
even after the
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age
of
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16(“Parents
Have No Right To
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Control
The
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Lives
Of
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Children
Above 16,
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”
2019). It is
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important
to remember that adolescents
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need
their
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parents
not
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only
to set appropriate expectations and boundaries,
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but
also
to advocate for them(Torres).

In summary, this essay draws the fact that irrespective of
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some
debates,
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parents
should monitor and associate themselves with their
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teenagers
to run their
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lives
.
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Teenagers
should know that they
still
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need
their
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parents
even if they are not of the same opinion.
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IELTS essay Parents should have no control over the lives of their children once they turn 16.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
670 words
6.0
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