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PARACHUTE PICTURE & WORKING

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THIS PICTURE SHOWS THE PARACHUTE WHICH HAS A BASKET AND COOL AIR MAKES THE BASKET HEAVY FROM THE BOTTOM. A BURNER WITH A PROPANE CYLINDER MIX PROPANE WITH THE AIR TO PRODUCES FLAME TO MAKE HOT AIR WHICH MAKES THE PARACHUTE LIGHTER AND IT FLOATS IN THE AIR. THE BASKET IS CONNECTED TO ROPE FROM BOTH THE ENDS FOR A SUPPORT AND THEN CONNECTED WITH THE SKIRT. A BIG BALLOON-LIKE SHAPE IS KNOWN AS AN ENVELOPE THAT CONSISTS OF DIFFERENT GORES AND GORES IS SECTIONED WITH THE NUMBER OF PANELS. ON THE TOP A SEALING FLAP IS THERE WHICH ALLOWS HOT AIR TO ESCAPE AT A CONTROLLED RATE AND IS KNOWN AS A PARACHUTE VALVE. THE RIDE OF THE PARACHUTE IS VERY LIGHT IT FLOATS ABOVE THE SKY AND IS A WONDERFUL EXPERIENCE. ONE SHOULD DEFINITELY TRY THE PARACHUTE RIDE TO FEEL A UNFORGETTABLE JOURNEY WITH A LIFETIME EXPERIENCE.
THIS PICTURE
SHOWS
THE PARACHUTE WHICH HAS A BASKET AND COOL
AIR
MAKES
THE BASKET HEAVY FROM THE BOTTOM. A BURNER WITH A PROPANE CYLINDER MIX PROPANE WITH THE
AIR
TO PRODUCES FLAME TO
MAKE
HOT
AIR
WHICH
MAKES
THE PARACHUTE LIGHTER AND IT FLOATS IN THE
AIR
. THE BASKET
IS CONNECTED
TO ROPE FROM BOTH THE ENDS FOR A SUPPORT AND THEN CONNECTED WITH THE SKIRT. A
BIG
BALLOON-LIKE SHAPE
IS KNOWN
AS AN ENVELOPE THAT CONSISTS OF
DIFFERENT
GORES AND GORES
IS SECTIONED
WITH THE NUMBER OF PANELS. ON THE TOP A SEALING FLAP IS THERE WHICH
ALLOWS
HOT
AIR
TO ESCAPE AT A CONTROLLED RATE AND
IS KNOWN
AS A PARACHUTE VALVE.

THE RIDE OF THE PARACHUTE IS
VERY
LIGHT IT FLOATS ABOVE THE SKY AND IS A WONDERFUL EXPERIENCE. ONE SHOULD DEFINITELY TRY THE PARACHUTE RIDE TO FEEL A UNFORGETTABLE JOURNEY WITH A LIFETIME EXPERIENCE.
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IELTS essay PARACHUTE PICTURE & WORKING

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
149 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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