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A large amount of ads are nowadays targeted children.Many people say that it has negative effects it should be banned.agree or disagree

A large amount of ads are nowadays targeted children. Many people say that it has negative effects it should be banned. agree or disagree bE8VW
Advertisements are ubiquitous nowadays. It is considered that, much more ads are aimed children. Although advertisenemy has a plethora of positive affect, there are also many drawbacks as well. In this essay the importance of ads and drawbacks will be discussed. To commence with, there are number of reasons why adverts are targetting children. Most ads are attracted because of their colour. For instance, children do not have the abilities to make wise judgement, in this wise, ads companies use this as an advantage. To dimish this issue parents, steps must be taken by parents. In addition, cencership should be there to limit the access for children. Furthermore, fast foods are unhealthy perticularly for children. For example, burgers, Mac Donald. These food may cause to health problems in them, such as obesity. To tackle this problem, the government should encourage the people to purchase healthy foods. Moreover, people should arrange campaign and seminar. it may helps to reduce this trend in people. On the other hand, ads help individuals in various ways. Via ads people could know about new products in markets. It has been provided an important service to consumers and manufactures. For example, if there is no ads for electronic and prints, many products might not be bought. In addition ads touch social issues. For example, persons can see adds via television and cellphone. In this wise people can see the traditions of another countries. In summary, In my opinion, though ads have so many drawbacks, while it is also has much advantages, therefore we cannot do away with.
Advertisements are ubiquitous nowadays. It
is considered
that, much more ads
are aimed
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children
. Although
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advertisenemy
has a plethora of
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positive
affect, there are
also
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many
drawbacks
as well
. In this essay the importance of ads and drawbacks will
be discussed
.

To commence with, there are number of reasons why adverts are
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targetting
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children
. Most ads
are attracted
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because
of their
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colour
.
For instance
,
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children
do not have the abilities to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
wise judgement, in this wise, ads
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companies
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use
this as an advantage. To
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dimish
this issue parents, steps
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must
be taken
by parents.
In addition
,
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cencership
should be there to limit the access for children.

Furthermore
,
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fast
foods are unhealthy
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perticularly
for
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children
.
For example
, burgers, Mac Donald.
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These food
may cause to health problems in them, such as obesity. To tackle this problem, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should encourage the
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
healthy foods.
Moreover
,
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people
should arrange campaign and seminar.
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it
may
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helps
to
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reduce
this trend in
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people
.

On the other hand
, ads
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help
individuals in various ways. Via ads
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people
could know about new products in markets. It has
been provided
an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
service to consumers and manufactures.
For example
, if
Did you mean "there are no ads"?
there is no ads
for electronic and prints,
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many
products might not be
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bought
. In
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addition
ads touch social issues.
For example
, persons can
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see
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adds
via television and cellphone. In this wise
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people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the traditions of another countries.

In summary, In my opinion, though ads have
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so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
drawbacks, while it is
also
has
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much
advantages,
therefore
we cannot do away with.
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IELTS essay A large amount of ads are nowadays targeted children. Many people say that it has negative effects it should be banned. agree or disagree

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