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Example of endangered animals

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There are many species of animal endangered, but I believe The Persian jaguar are increasingly at risk of extinction and there are some reasons behind this. First and foremost, poaching poses the greatest threat to Persian jaguars especially. when there is no limit and control, poachers do unsustainable hunting and Persian jaguar are dying out more than in the past. As well as this, industrial pollution has taken a heavy toll on Persian jaguar populations. Industrial waste, pollute the environment and because of that Persian jaguar are in danger of losing their natural habitat. And finally the deforestation because of urban growth patterns and especially urban sprawl, is wiping out Persian jaguar
There are
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many
species of animal endangered,
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but
I believe The Persian jaguar are
increasingly
at
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risk
of extinction and there are
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some
reasons behind this.

First
and foremost, poaching poses the greatest threat to Persian jaguars
especially
.
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when
there is no limit and control, poachers do unsustainable hunting and Persian jaguar are dying out more than in the past.

As well
as this, industrial pollution has taken a heavy toll on Persian jaguar populations. Industrial waste, pollute the environment and
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because
of that Persian jaguar are in
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danger
of losing their natural habitat.

And
finally
the deforestation
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because
of urban growth patterns and
especially
urban sprawl, is wiping out Persian jaguar
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IELTS essay Example of endangered animals

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
111 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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