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Paln a below show health center in 2005 .paln b show the same place in present day.

Paln a below show health center in 2005. paln b show the same place in present day. Jo3Rk
The given image represent an overall change of health center from 2005 until present day. First of all a hung change that can be observed is the size of the parking lot and the garden. they cut off lots of space of garden to given more room for the parking which is now thity spaces comparing to twelve spaces perviously. Furthermore, we can see that the health center now is providing more consultant room to meet the needs of partinents and one operations rooms which is located on the left side of physiotherapy room. another added place to the centre is the children's play area. it is placed in front of reception desk. behind the entrance on the left side of health center in order that the receptionist can look out for children while they play. To sum up, the health center has changed a ton, providing more services and the environment is more spacious. So significant variation has been recorded.
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given
image represent an
overall
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change
of
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health
center from 2005 until present day.

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First of all
a hung
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change
that can
be observed
is the size of the parking lot and the garden.
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they
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cut
off lots of space of garden to
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given
more
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room
for the parking which is
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now
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thity
spaces comparing to twelve spaces
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perviously
.

Furthermore
, we can
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see
that the
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health
center
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now
is providing more consultant
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room
to
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meet
the needs of
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partinents
and one operations
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rooms
which
is located
on the
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left
side of physiotherapy
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room
.
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another
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added
place to the
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centre
is the children's play area.
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it
is placed
in front of reception desk.
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behind
the entrance on the
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left
side of
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health
center in order that the receptionist can look out for children while they play.

To sum up, the
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health
center has
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changed
a ton, providing more services and the environment is more spacious.

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So
significant variation has
been recorded
.
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IELTS essay Paln a below show health center in 2005. paln b show the same place in present day.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
161 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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