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When he was nearly thirteen, my brother Jem got his arm badly broken at the elbow

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When he was nearly thirteen, my brother Jem got his arm badly broken at the elbow. When it healed, and Jem’s fears of never being able to play football were assuaged, he was seldom self-conscious about his injury. His left arm was somewhat shorter than his right; when he stood or walked, the back of his hand was at right angles to his body, his thumb parallel to his thigh. He couldn’t have cared less, so long as he could pass and punt. When enough years had gone by to enable us to look back on them, we sometimes discussed the events leading to his accident. I maintain that the Ewells started it all, but Jem, who was four years my senior, said it started long before that. He said it began the summer Dill came to us, when Dill first gave us the idea of making Boo Radley come out. I said if he wanted to take a broad view of the thing, it really began with Andrew Jackson. If General Jackson hadn’t run the Creeks up the creek, Simon Finch would never have paddled up the Alabama, and where would we be if he hadn’t?
When he was
nearly
thirteen, my brother
Jem
got
his arm
badly
broken at the

elbow. When it healed, and
Jem
’s fears of never being able to play football
were assuaged
, he was seldom self-conscious about his injury. His
left
arm was

somewhat shorter than his right; when he stood or walked, the back of his hand

was at right angles to his body, his thumb parallel to his thigh. He couldn’t have

cared less,
so
long as he could pass and punt.

When
enough
years had gone by to enable us to look back on them, we

sometimes
discussed the
events
leading to his accident. I maintain that the
Ewells


started
it all,
but
Jem
, who was four years my senior, said it
started
long
before


that. He said it began the summer Dill came to us, when Dill
first
gave us the
idea


of making Boo Radley
come
out.

I said if he wanted to take a broad view of the thing, it
really
began with Andrew

Jackson. If General Jackson hadn’t run the Creeks up the creek, Simon Finch

would never have paddled up the Alabama, and where would we be if he hadn’t?
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IELTS essay When he was nearly thirteen, my brother Jem got his arm badly broken at the elbow

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197 words
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