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Owning a car is becoming increasingly more popular over past 3 decades. With everyone purchasing there own car has eventually gave a path to heavy traffic jam in big cities.

Owning a car is becoming increasingly more popular over past 3 decades. With everyone purchasing there own car has eventually gave a path to heavy traffic jam in big cities. nENkK
Owning a car is becoming increasingly more popular over past 3 decades. With everyone purchasing there own car has eventually gave a path to heavy traffic jam in big cities. I totally agree to this because it is now clear that traffic jam is the major concern that government is dealing in metropolitan areas. This essay will discuss the measures need to be implemented by the government to reduce car usage. Firstly, government has to take one major step to provide better public transportation. Here better refers to both quality and quantity. For example, two decades back the total population was around 700 million in India and available public transportation was able to sustain that local travelers. However the population has rapidly increased by 2021, on the contrary, the public transport remained same. Therefore, authority has to allocate more number of buses for single bus route to balance the crowd. Secondly, the authority should keep in mind that the price range of public transportation should be affordable by every individual. For example, government has taken good initiative and started new Metrorail which covers whole Hyderabad city. However, railway corporation have kept huge amount for using Metrorail even for shorter distance. Consequently, many people from lower financial background could not afford it. To conclude, if management can provide better alternative for travelling with good quality as well as for lower price it could encourage more individuals to use public transportation instead of using there own cars.
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more popular over past 3 decades. With everyone purchasing there
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own
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car
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now
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clear
that traffic jam is the major concern that
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government
is dealing in metropolitan areas. This essay will discuss the measures need to
be implemented
by the
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government
to
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reduce
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car
usage.

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,
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government
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has to
take one major step to provide better
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public
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transportation
. Here better refers to both quality and quantity.
For example
, two decades back the total population was around 700 million in India and available
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public
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transportation
was able to sustain that local travelers.
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However
the population has
rapidly
increased by 2021,
on the contrary
, the
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public
transport remained same.
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, authority
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has to
allocate more number of buses for single bus route to balance the crowd.

Secondly
, the authority should
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keep
in mind that the price range of
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public
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transportation
should be affordable by every individual.
For example
,
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government
has taken
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good
initiative and
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started
new
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Metrorail
which covers whole Hyderabad city.
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, railway corporation have
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kept
huge amount for using
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Metrorail
even for shorter distance.
Consequently
,
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many
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people
from lower financial background could not afford it.

To conclude
, if management can provide better alternative for travelling with
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good
quality
as well
as for lower price it could encourage more individuals to
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use
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public
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transportation
instead
of using there
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own
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cars
.
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IELTS essay Owning a car is becoming increasingly more popular over past 3 decades. With everyone purchasing there own car has eventually gave a path to heavy traffic jam in big cities.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
245 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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