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One Child Policy has been noted as an effective way to help contain the overflow of population.

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Policies have a phenomenal power towards civilians, both positive and negative. The one child policy is a birth planning procedure that restricts couples from having more than one child. It was first prefaced by the Chinese leader Deng Xiaoping in the Republic of China from 1979 through 2015. Over the years, it gained a discriminative reputation for its cruel, brutal, and unethical methods. The one-child policy in China, which stirred up a lot of controversy in social media, was aimed to aid the rapid population growth. China was facing a significant problem in which it had to feed 22% of the world with just 7% of its land. Nevertheless, I believe that the mechanism of this procedure adds up to the existent issues while barely achieving its initial aim. Firstly, I would like to bring up the injustice towards families facing the protocol who not only will get their infants taken away, but also get harsh treatment. Back when the policy was active in China, many grieving parents shared stories of losing their children in the face of the then-active one child policy. Washington Post journalist Simon Denyer interviewed people who experienced the horror in hopes to discover what they underwent. Amongst many cases, a man who went through the protocol in China described it as uncivil. Afterward, he led on with details of how a group of people barged into their home, grabbed his wife like she was a pig, and put the baby in a plastic bag to be buried alive on a nearby hill. The family shouldn't have to put up with such a traumatic encounter that eminently defies their human rights. If the one child policy becomes globally implemented, there would undoubtedly be a disparity of gender ratio, possibly as drastic as China's gender imbalance at the time of the policy in which two-thirds of the population were men. Since only one child is allowed, families would most likely choose to abandon girls rather than boys because of their ability to carry their surname for generations to come and the belief that they will grow up to have more potential in money-making. The imbalance in gender will cause problems since it will be increasingly difficult for a man to find a wife to bear him children and maintain the family line. Another significant issue that may come along with the one-child policy is the increase in abortion and infanticide rates. Formerly in China, the number of abortions was equivalent to an estimated nine folds of other countries. Moreover, the use of infanticides jumped a whopping 60% from its initial digits. The birth rate quickly depleted from 2. 75 births per woman to 1. 62. The likelihood that a similar case will take place if this policy were to be applied to other countries is undeniably high. Furthermore, an issue that may surface is the government targeting the urban poor more rather than the wealthy. This issue has happened before and is most likely to happen again. The wealthy could easily pay the fine for having multiple children. On the other hand, it is not that simple for the impecunious. If they cannot afford to pay the fine for having additional children, there is a possibility that their property would be seized. This will lead to major issues in the likes of child abandonment and poverty. Not only will this policy be a detriment to citizens but also the government themselves. Financially speaking, enforcement policies and procedures require a lot of money. Even after citizens pay the fine, it will still wound up to a significant financial loss. Based on China's history with this policy, the government's intake from the fines never fully recouped the expenses of the one-child policy. All in all, it has been proven by China that the one-child policy was a failure of a procedure. I believe that it would be entirely indecent to replicate the same mistake in other countries. Instead, I think that overpopulation should be handled with subtler measures such as spreading the importance of family planning. The prior-existing idea of giving incentives to families who abide by the policy is efficacious if precluding the part where they repudiated the additional child.
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have a phenomenal power towards civilians, both
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and
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. The one
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child
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is a birth planning
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that restricts couples from having more than one
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child
. It was
first
prefaced by the Chinese leader Deng Xiaoping in the Republic of China from 1979 through 2015. Over the years, it gained a
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discriminative
reputation for its cruel, brutal, and unethical methods. The one-child
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policy
in China, which stirred up
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a lot of
controversy in social media,
was aimed
to aid the rapid population growth. China was facing a significant problem in which it had to feed 22% of the world with
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just
7% of its land.
Nevertheless
, I believe that the mechanism of this
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procedure
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adds
up to the existent
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issues
while
barely
achieving its initial aim.

Firstly
, I would like to bring up the injustice towards
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families
facing the protocol
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who
not
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only
will
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get
their infants taken away,
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also
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get
harsh treatment. Back when the
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policy
was active in China,
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many
grieving parents shared stories of losing their
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children
in the face of the then-active one
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child
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policy
. Washington Post journalist Simon
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Denyer
interviewed
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people
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who
experienced the horror in hopes to discover what they underwent. Amongst
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many
cases, a
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man
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who
went through the protocol in China
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described
it as uncivil. Afterward, he led on with
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details
of how a group of
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people
barged into their home, grabbed his wife like she was a pig, and put the baby in a plastic bag to
be buried
alive on a nearby hill. The
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family
shouldn't
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have to
put up with such a traumatic encounter that
eminently
defies their human rights.

If the one
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child
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policy
becomes globally implemented, there would
undoubtedly
be a disparity of gender ratio,
possibly
as drastic as China's gender imbalance at the time of the
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policy
in which two-thirds of the population were
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men
. Since
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only
one
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child
is
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allowed
,
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families
would most likely choose to abandon girls
rather
than boys
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because
of their ability to carry their surname for generations to
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come
and the belief that they will grow up to have more potential in money-making. The imbalance in gender will cause problems since it will be
increasingly
difficult for a
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man
to find a wife to bear him
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children
and maintain the
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family
line.

Another significant
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issue
that may
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come
along with the one-child
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policy
is the increase in abortion and infanticide rates.
Formerly
in China, the number of abortions was equivalent to an estimated nine folds of
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other
countries.
Moreover
, the
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use
of infanticides jumped a whopping 60% from its initial digits. The birth rate
quickly
depleted from 2. 75 births per woman to 1. 62. The likelihood that a similar case will take place if this
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policy
were to
be applied
to
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other
countries is
undeniably
high.

Furthermore
, an
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issue
that may surface is the
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government
targeting the urban poor more
rather
than the wealthy. This
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issue
has happened
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before
and is most likely to happen again. The wealthy could
easily
pay the
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fine
for having multiple
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children
. On the
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other
hand, it is not that simple for the impecunious. If they cannot afford to pay the
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fine
for having additional
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children
, there is a possibility that their property would
be seized
. This will lead to major
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issues
in the likes of
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child
abandonment and poverty.

Not
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only
will this
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policy
be a detriment to citizens
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but
also
the
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government
themselves.
Financially
speaking, enforcement
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policies
and
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procedures
require
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a lot of
money. Even after citizens pay the
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fine
, it will
still
wound up to a significant financial loss. Based on China's history with this
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policy
, the
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government
's intake from the
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fines
never
fully
recouped the expenses of the one-child policy.

All in all, it has
been proven
by China that the one-child
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policy
was a failure of a
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procedure
. I believe that it would be
entirely
indecent to replicate the same mistake in
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other
countries.
Instead
, I
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think
that overpopulation should
be handled
with subtler measures such as spreading the importance of
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family
planning. The prior-existing
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idea
of giving incentives to
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families
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who
abide by the
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policy
is efficacious if precluding the part where they repudiated the additional
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child
.

IELTS essay One Child Policy has been noted as an effective way to help contain the overflow of population.

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