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Overweight people is a strain on the health care system

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is fitness for at so as it Health care system is with health issues caused by the overreight doing an effort to deal people whose number are rapidly increasing For the purpose of elimination of the health issues around the world some people think that the effective way to deal with this problem is to practice more physical educations lessons, exercise and sports in the schools curriculum. I disagree with this statement reason ise maintaing good food diet and proper nutritents is more wiser option than forcing to pratice more physical exercise in the school curriculum. Moden calone weight fats. activity problem tackle food a consid
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fitness

for at

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it Health
care system is

with health issues caused by the
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overreight


doing

an effort to deal

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people
whose number are
rapidly
increasing

For the purpose of elimination of the health

issues around the world
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some
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people


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think
that

the effective way to deal

with this problem is to practice more

physical educations lessons, exercise and

sports in the
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schools
curriculum.

I disagree with this statement reason
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ise


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maintaing
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good


food diet and proper
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nutritents
is
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more wiser
option than forcing to
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pratice
more

physical exercise in the school curriculum.

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Moden


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calone


weight

fats.

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activity


problem

tackle

food a

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IELTS essay Overweight people is a strain on the health care system

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
105 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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