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Overweight is a big concern so that is the reason?

Overweight is a big concern so that is the reason? Lr3bV

It is a bitter truth that lots of people are suffering from chronic diseases like blood pressure, obesity due to overweight. There are myraid reasons behind this deplorable condition. This essay will highlight some major causes and provide few solutions to overcome from it. However, doctors are not diagnose the disease on time and make huge concern in near future. Is overweight only responsible for any individual's health? First of all, lack of physical activity in daily routine is a primary reason for the overweight issue. Moreover, technology and automation revolution make people's life effortless. In other words, adolescents have been more addicted for fast food such as Chinese food and eat pizza and burger which will make them more unhealthy while adults are more focus on normal diet due to disorderness and they are only interested for rudimentary meals. On the other hand, society have been organised various health camps but people are not interested to attend and take it lightly but this will helpful for their health not others. For example, in India, government has conducted various program for everyone but is is not only any individual responsibility. Taking the fruits or ample vegetable in the diet and avoid junk food. In conclusion, overweight is a serious issue but it can be control by taking approciate action and spread awareness for healthy environment. According to me, everyone's understanding is obligatory and take proper medicine before making it major concern in future and this can happen because of human error.

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people
 are suffering from chronic diseases like blood pressure, obesity due to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withobesecorpulentpudgy
overweight
. There are Possible spelling mistake found.myriadmy raid
myraid
 reasons behind this deplorable condition. This essay will highlight This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 major causes and provide few solutions to overcome from it. However
, doctors are not Consider using a past participle here: "diagnosed".diagnosed
diagnose
 the disease on time and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
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 huge concern in near future. Is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withobesecorpulentpudgy
overweight
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only
 responsible for any individual's health?

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, lack of physical activity in daily routine is a primary reason for the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withobesecorpulentpudgy
overweight
 issue. Moreover
, technology and automation revolution This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
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people
's life effortless. In other words
, adolescents have been more addicted for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:quickrapidswiftprompt
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 food such as Chinese food and eat pizza and burger which will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
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interested for
 rudimentary meals.

On the other hand
, society have been Possible spelling mistake. 'organised' is British English.organized
organised
 various health camps This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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people
 are not interested to attend and take it lightly
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but
 this will helpful for their health not others. For example
, in India, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 has conducted various program for everyone This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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is is
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only
 any individual responsibility. Taking the fruits or ample vegetable in the diet and avoid junk food.

In conclusion
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withobesecorpulentpudgy
overweight
 is a serious issue This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it can be control by taking Possible spelling mistake found.appreciate
approciate
 action and spread awareness for healthy environment. This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".In my opinionI think
According to me
,

everyone'The verb 'understanding' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
s understanding
 is obligatory and take proper medicine This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 making it major concern in future and this can happen This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of human error. 