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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v.27

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 27
Nowadays the number of people moving to cities is increasing at a rapid pace. Unfortunately, this trend has generated some negative side-effects such as sanitation problems in crowded areas as well as ever increasing traffic on roads. This essay will further discuss about these issues and measures that can be taken to tackle them. Most governments are struggling to keep up the minimum level of sanitation in the urban areas. There are few vacant lands available for people to live despite the growing number of people coming into these cities. Hence, the local councils are failing to keep the places clean. One of the most obvious examples is the garbage that is thrown onto the roads. Moreover, there are enormous levels of traffic on the roads of every urban city in the world. This issue directly wasting the valuable time of the citizens. Not only that, the amount money wasted on fuel also alarming for the economy of nations. In the Colombo city it takes more than 2 hours to commute 17 kilometres, which people can travel in 40 minutes without the traffic. There are quite a few actions that can be taken to address the problem generated by overpopulation. Firstly, the government can develop the public transportation of the cities such as railway systems. Because it has been identified that railway is one of the most feasible solution for the raising traffic problem all over the world. Secondly, by building more garbage-recycling plants in the cities, authorities can manage to keep the urban areas clean, which eventually increase the sanitation level of these places. In conclusion, due to the overpopulation, most raising problems faced by urban cities are sanitation issues and heavy traffic on the roads. However, if governments can improve the public transportation systems and develop more waste recycling plants in those areas to these issues can be tackled.
Nowadays the number of
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people
moving to
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cities
is increasing at a rapid pace. Unfortunately, this trend has generated
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some
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negative
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side-effects
such as
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sanitation
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problems
in crowded
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areas
as well
as
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ever increasing
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traffic
on
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roads
. This essay will
further
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discuss about these
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issues
and measures that can
be taken
to tackle them.

Most
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governments
are struggling to
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keep
up the minimum level of
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sanitation
in the
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urban
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areas
. There are few vacant lands available for
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people
to
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live
despite the growing number of
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people
coming into these
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cities
.
Hence
, the local councils are failing to
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keep
the places clean. One of the most obvious examples is the garbage that
is thrown
onto the
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roads
.
Moreover
, there are enormous levels of
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traffic
on the
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roads
of every
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urban
city in the world. This
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issue
directly
wasting the valuable time of the citizens. Not
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only
that, the amount money wasted on fuel
also
alarming for the economy of nations. In the Colombo city it takes more than 2 hours to commute 17
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kilometres
, which
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people
can travel in 40 minutes without the traffic.

There are quite a few actions that can
be taken
to address the
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problem
generated by overpopulation.
Firstly
, the
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government
can develop the public transportation of the
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cities
such as railway systems.
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Because
it has
been identified
that railway is one of the most feasible solution for the raising
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traffic
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problem
all over the world.
Secondly
, by building more garbage-recycling plants in the
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cities
, authorities can manage to
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keep
the
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urban
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areas
clean, which
eventually
increase the
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sanitation
level of these places.

In conclusion
, due to the overpopulation, most raising
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problems
faced by
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urban
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cities
are
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sanitation
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issues
and heavy
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traffic
on the
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roads
.
However
, if
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governments
can
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improve
the public transportation systems and develop more waste recycling plants in those
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areas
to these
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issues
can
be tackled
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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