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1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.5

1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. with this opinion? v. 5
In the modern world, although many people are willing to pay for their studies in order to pay taxes and make the society better, others feel that the government should provide the citizens with free education, as many families cannot afford the high cost for the study. After pondering this phenomenon, I believe that the applicants who come from poor families should receive a grant for their studies. On the one hand, it is true that the main reason for making university fees, costly is the quality of education. In this regard, some citizens are willing to pay for their studies in order to help to the government. Moreover, if individuals pay for their education, the government can spend the budget for improving other fields. For instance, they can develop the healthcare system, infrastructure and industry. On the other hand, it is clear that poor families cannot pay for their children's university studies. In this reason, many people are keen to think that these kinds of families should receive a free grant, which is provided by the state. Furthermore, some people believe that such kind of method is beneficial for the state, as because of educated people, they can develop its economy in the future. For example, if the doctors receive did not pay for their university life, the authorities can use their abilities and qualification in the prospective. In conclusion, although many people tend to think that individuals should pay for their courses and lectures, personally, I believe that the state will get a benefit from their knowledge in the future. In addition, they can use them for their own purposes in the future because professionals are needed by the authorities.
In the modern world, although
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many
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people
are willing to
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pay
for their
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studies
in order to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
taxes and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the society better, others feel that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should provide the citizens with free education, as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
cannot afford the high cost for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
. After pondering this phenomenon, I believe that the applicants who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
from poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
families
should receive a grant for their studies.

On the one hand, it is true that the main reason for making university fees, costly is the quality of education. In this regard,
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some
citizens are willing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
Moreover
, if individuals
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pay
for their education, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can spend the budget for improving other fields.
For instance
, they can develop the healthcare system, infrastructure and industry.

On the other hand
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that poor
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families
cannot
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pay
for their children's university
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studies
. In this reason,
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many
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people
are keen to
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think
that these kinds of
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families
should receive a free grant, which
is provided
by the state.
Furthermore
,
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some
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people
believe that such kind of method is beneficial for the state, as
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because
of educated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, they can develop its economy in the future.
For example
, if the doctors receive did not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
for their university life, the authorities can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their abilities and qualification in the prospective.

In conclusion
, although
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that individuals should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
for their courses and lectures,
personally
, I believe that the state will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a benefit from their knowledge in the future.
In addition
, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
purposes in the future
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because
professionals
are needed
by the authorities.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay 1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. with this opinion? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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