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Overpopulation in most developing countries in Asia and Africa is a problem. If these countries do not try to control the population immediately, they will face serious problems. What are your suggestions to control population? v.2

Overpopulation in most developing countries in Asia and Africa is a problem. If these countries do not try to control the population immediately, they will face serious problems. What are your suggestions to control population? v. 2
The population growth in the world is already out of control and this is more daunting in Asian and African countries. The population growth in these regions is uncontrollable due to ignorance, poor quality of life, and the religious and social taboo against population control. In this essay, I will briefly suggest some issues that overpopulation causes and some ways to control it. Overpopulation causes a complex set of problems that negatively affect the quality of life, increase crime, pollution and corruption. Increasing population create more pressure on the already limited resources in the poor and developing countries and an upsurge in population will simply make the situation worse. Unemployment, inadequate infrastructure, poverty, malnutrition, low literacy rates and high competition already make the citizens suffer a lot and if the population growth is not controlled, it will make things worse day by day. Controlling the population in a country could not be achieved overnight and despite initiatives and educational campaigns, the result might come slowly due to the social and religious taboo and lack of education. However, proper steps should be taken to control the rapid expansion of population. First and foremost is to make the social movements and awareness campaigns more frequent, especially among the poor citizens to educate them the negative consequences they will go through if they do not control the number of children in their family. Making contraceptives available for free among the poor population should be ensured. Finally, the government must impose laws and rules to restrict the family members. For instance, families in China are not allowed to have more than one child and if any family violates it, they are financially punished. This may seem cruel at first but the one-child policy has already given positive outcomes to many populous countries. In conclusion, if the population keeps on increasing at the current rate, the world would soon find itself in the verse of war for food, shelter and medicine. Increasing population can only deteriorate the lifestyle of people and this is even cruel in poor and developing countries. The time has come to take every step possible to tackle the heinous speed of population growth and countries should work together to bring an effective solution.
The
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population
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growth
in the world is
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already
out of
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control
and this is more daunting in Asian and African
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countries
. The
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population
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growth
in these regions is uncontrollable due to ignorance,
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poor
quality of life, and the religious and social taboo against
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population
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control
. In this essay, I will
briefly
suggest
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some
issues that overpopulation causes and
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some
ways to
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control
it.

Overpopulation causes a complex set of problems that
negatively
affect the quality of life, increase crime, pollution and corruption. Increasing
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population
create more pressure on the
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already
limited resources in the
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poor
and developing
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countries
and an upsurge in
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population
will
simply
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make
the situation worse. Unemployment, inadequate infrastructure, poverty, malnutrition, low literacy rates and high competition
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already
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make
the citizens suffer a lot and if the
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population
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growth
is not controlled, it will
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make
things worse day by day.

Controlling the
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population
in a
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country
could not
be achieved
overnight and despite initiatives and educational campaigns, the result might
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come
slowly
due to the social and religious taboo and lack of education.
However
, proper steps should
be taken
to
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control
the rapid expansion of
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population
.
First
and foremost is to
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make
the social movements and awareness campaigns more frequent,
especially
among the
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poor
citizens to educate them the
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negative
consequences they will go through if they do not
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control
the number of children in their family.

Making contraceptives available for free among the
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poor
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population
should
be ensured
.
Finally
, the
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government
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must
impose laws and
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rules
to restrict the family members.
For instance
, families in China are not
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allowed
to have more than one child and if any family violates it, they are
financially
punished. This may seem cruel at
first
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but
the one-child policy has
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already
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given
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positive
outcomes to
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many
populous countries.

In conclusion
, if the
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population
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keeps
on increasing at the
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current
rate, the world would
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soon
find itself in the verse of war for food, shelter and medicine. Increasing
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population
can
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only
deteriorate the lifestyle of
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people
and this is even cruel in
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poor
and developing
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countries
. The time has
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come
to take every step possible to tackle the heinous speed of
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population
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growth
and
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countries
should work together to bring an effective solution.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Overpopulation in most developing countries in Asia and Africa is a problem. If these countries do not try to control the population immediately, they will face serious problems. What are your suggestions to control population? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
372 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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