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others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements

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On the other hand, I side with those who argue that schools should reward graduates who make great developments in the educational environment. Firstly, Rewarding students for good improvements could create motivations for everyone in the classroom. If graduates know their efforts are recognized, they will work harder to yield higher results. In contrast, only smart students can be able to come top in the class are rewarded while normal students may think that they can't possibly afford to compete with intelligent students. Therefore, we should reward improvement so as not to discourage their potential. Secondly, a rewarding scheme based on scores can encourage cheating. Because students are obsessed by reward, they resort to any means available such behaviours: copying others answers or opening books.

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