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Organ Trafficking in italy

Organ Trafficking in italy 73Le5
Honorable Chair, Esteemed delegates. The delegate of  italy organ trafficking is not an issue that occurs in just a single country or region of the world. Rather, it is a global dilemma requiring a global solution. However, organ trafficking rates vary per country. organ trafficking in Italy represents an issue affecting other European nations as well. The Government of Italy continued its strong law enforcement efforts in 2007. Italy prohibits all forms of trafficking in organ through its Measures Against organ Trafficking law of 2003, which prescribes penalties on conviction of between eight and twenty years’ imprisonment.
Honorable Chair, Esteemed delegates.

The delegate of
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trafficking is not an issue that occurs in
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a single country or region of the world.
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, it is a global dilemma requiring a global solution.
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,
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trafficking rates vary per country.
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organ
trafficking in Italy represents an issue affecting other European nations
as well
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of Italy continued its strong law enforcement efforts in 2007. Italy prohibits all forms of trafficking in
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through its Measures Against
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Trafficking law of 2003, which prescribes penalties on conviction of between eight and twenty years’ imprisonment.
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IELTS essay Organ Trafficking in italy

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
95 words
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