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Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people? v.3

Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people? v. 3
In this era television and newspaper have a great influence on common people's life. Ordinary people always try to copy eminent personalities when they are appearing on TV or magazines. I strongly believe it is not all appreciable. In this essay we will scrutinize why the normal people imitate famous persons and also analyse why it is not a good practice. To begin, Famous personalities are always present in different TV shows or newspapers. The Common people, especially, teenagers always try to mirror famous personalities because of two main reasons. Firstly Young people believe that if they emulate the eminent personalities, particularly, film stars they will become more popular in a short time span. For instance, a majority of youngsters in India follow some film stars or sports persons. In addition, another group people argues that, mirroring eminent personality’s behaviour will give success in their life. Because of these irrelevant thoughts most of the young people try to follow the famous personality’s life style. Conversely, excessive copying tendency will result high physical and mental health related problems. A recent survey, conducted in India reveals that, in 2015 30 % of teenage girls undergo different kind of cosmic surgeries. These surgeries adversely affect their physical health. In addition, high, mirroring behaviour sometimes leads to poor school attendance and will result in bad academic performance which further affects their mental health. To recapitulate, it is better to believe yourself for success rather than copying other’s behaviour. TV and newspapers are projecting only positive side of the success and always try to hide the bad side from the public.
In this era television and newspaper have a great influence on common
people
's life. Ordinary
people
always try to copy eminent personalities when they
are appearing
on TV or magazines. I
strongly
believe it is not all appreciable. In this essay we will scrutinize why the normal
people
imitate
famous
persons and
also
analyse
why it is not a
good
practice.

To
begin
,
Famous
personalities are always present in
different
TV
shows
or newspapers. The Common
people
,
especially
,
teenagers
always try to mirror
famous
personalities
because
of two main reasons.
Firstly
Young
people
believe that if they emulate the eminent personalities,
particularly
, film stars they will become more popular in a short time span.
For instance
, a majority of youngsters in India follow
some
film stars or sports persons.
In addition
, another group
people
argues
that, mirroring eminent
personality’s
behaviour
will give success in their life.
Because
of these irrelevant thoughts most of the young
people
try to follow the
famous
personality’s
life style.

Conversely
, excessive copying tendency will result high physical and mental health related problems. A recent survey, conducted in India reveals that, in 2015 30 % of teenage girls undergo
different
kind of cosmic surgeries. These surgeries
adversely
affect their physical health.
In addition
, high, mirroring
behaviour
sometimes
leads to poor school attendance and will result in
bad
academic performance which
further
affects their mental health.

To recapitulate, it is better to believe yourself for success
rather
than copying other’s
behaviour
. TV and newspapers are projecting
only
positive
side of the success and always try to
hide
the
bad
side from the public.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
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