Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? v.1

It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. with this view? v. 1
Recently, smart phones and other such handy gadgets have gained popularity all over the globe. Despite of the many benefits they provide, these devices can be a source of distraction for students in critics' eyes. However, negative side of these gadgets can be easily ignored by considering the advantages they have brought. This essay is going to highlight some of these positive advantages which can be of great help for students. Firstly, technological advancements had really made our life so much easier than it was before. Students can use smart phones to record lectures while listening to them at the same time. For example, in my case, it is a bit hard for me to concentrate on the lecture while preparing my notes in parallel. Therefore, I always prefer to use my smart phone to capture any important details which I may require in the future. Extending the benefits of electronic gadgets, they might save you a lot of money. Including students, people from different professions are using electronic gadgets like smart phones and tablets as a cheap substitute to conventional equipment. For example, students can download a free copy from textbook right into their smartphone, which will save them a considerable amount of money and also the hassle of carrying books to their classroom. All things considered; one can easily argue that a productive use of electronic gadgets within the classroom can be very beneficial for students. Since advantages associated with these devices worth much more than their drawbacks, therefore banning them all together is not a logical thing to do.
Recently,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
and other such handy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gadgets
have gained popularity all over the globe.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
benefits they provide, these devices can be a source of distraction for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in critics' eyes.
However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
side of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gadgets
can be
easily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
by considering the advantages they have brought. This essay is going to highlight
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of these
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
advantages which can be of great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
for students.

Firstly
, technological advancements had
really
made our life
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much easier than it was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Students
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
to record lectures while listening to them at the same time.
For example
, in my case, it is a bit
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for me to concentrate on the lecture while preparing my notes in parallel.
Therefore
, I always prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
to capture any
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
which I may require in the future.

Extending the benefits of electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gadgets
, they might save you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
money. Including
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
professions are using electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gadgets
like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
and tablets as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
substitute to conventional equipment.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
can download a free copy from textbook right into their smartphone, which will save them a considerable amount of money and
also
the hassle of carrying books to their classroom.

All things considered; one can
easily
argue that a productive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gadgets
within the classroom can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beneficial for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. Since advantages associated with these devices worth much more than their drawbacks,
therefore
banning them all together is not a logical thing to do.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. with this view? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts