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Opinions differ with regards to what kind of animal should to be kept in a zoo.

Opinions differ with regards to what kind of animal should to be kept in a zoo. While some people believe that ferocious ones should be kept in man-made reserved parks, others, however, argue that these beasts should instead, be left in the wild. This essay agrees that dangerous animals ought to be kept at their natural habitat. Firstly, the idea of keeping wild animals at zoological sites is one that disrupts the natural order. Animals such as lions, naturally if, left to roam freely in forests, may exercise their animal propensities to its apex by hunting or preying on the weaker animals. What's more, this "predator - prey" symbiosis, besides keeping a balance in the eco-system; maintains the order of food chain. Conversely, this could trigger an inbalance in the ecological world when vegetations decrease, owing to the increased number of herbivorous preys such as deers. To add up, the circumstances leading to the capture and transport of many of these "forest-zone" species are at times abhorring. Forested cats, for instance, leopards, are poached from their various hide-outs, caught and confined to metallic cages before being transported to stranger places. This inhumane act could cost a cub to lose its mother and ecological habitat through separation. Consequently, a number of these, that are often captured, may be restricted by movements to a confined space; which tends to lead to challenges in exploring and adapting to their new home and showcasing domineering nature and superiority against against the weaker ones. Moreover, the costs involved in the feeding of some reserved animals are extravagant to bear. To illustrate, the average adult elephant may consume about 50 tonnes of food every year. This clearly denotes the huge sums of money being invested in man-made reserved sites. To sum up, I believe the financial costs involved, together with destruction to the normal food cycle and adaptability difficulties are enough reasons to argue that wild beasts should be left to roam in the wild.
Opinions differ with regards to what kind of
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should to be
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people
believe that ferocious ones should be
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agrees
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dangerous
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animals
ought to be
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kept
at their natural habitat.

Firstly
, the
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idea
of keeping wild
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animals
at zoological sites is one that disrupts the natural order.
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Animals
such as lions,
naturally
if,
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left
to roam
freely
in forests, may exercise their
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animal
propensities to its apex by hunting or preying on the weaker
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animals
. What's more, this "predator - prey" symbiosis,
besides
keeping a balance in the eco-system; maintains the order of food chain.
Conversely
, this could trigger an inbalance in the ecological world when vegetations decrease, owing to the increased number of herbivorous preys such as deers.

To
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add
up, the circumstances leading to the capture and transport of
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many
of these "forest-zone" species are at times abhorring. Forested cats,
for instance
, leopards,
are poached
from their various
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hide
-outs, caught and confined to metallic cages
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before
being transported
to stranger places. This inhumane act could cost a cub to lose its mother and ecological habitat through separation.
Consequently
, a number of these, that are
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often
captured, may
be restricted
by movements to a confined space; which tends to lead to challenges in exploring and adapting to their new home and showcasing domineering nature and superiority against against the weaker ones.

Moreover
, the costs involved in the feeding of
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some
reserved
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animals
are extravagant to bear. To illustrate, the average adult elephant may consume about 50 tonnes of food every year. This
clearly
denotes the huge sums of money
being invested
in
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man
-made reserved sites.

To sum up, I believe the financial costs involved, together with destruction to the normal food cycle and adaptability difficulties are
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enough
reasons to argue that wild beasts should be
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left
to roam in the wild.
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IELTS essay Opinions differ with regards to what kind of animal should to be kept in a zoo.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
329 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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