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Only health food should be sold in school.Do you agree or disagree?

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Health food has always been popular topic among population throughout the world. The matter of selling only health food is a question that requires a careful consideration. It is agreed with the notion that nutrition food is useful for young generation health. This will be shown by analyzing that pupils never suffer from obesity and can take vitamis for improving mentally and phisically. Firstly, pupils will be good looking and do not come across obesity. For instanse, europian scientists argue that every year overage 70% teenagers suffer from overweight because of eating junk foods. It is widely argued that unhealthy foods have a lot of calory so it led to obesity. Therefore it can be concluded that selling health food instead of junk food in schools keep pupils extra weight. Secondly, health foods consist of a lot of vitamins and minerals. For instanse, statistical report revel that eating health food such as milk, nut, fruit improve people brain activity. 20% better than usual. It should be noted that such kind of food provide with daily needs. In summary, only eating nutritious food keep pupils global health problem and help their organizm to take useful microelements for improving mentally and physically. It can be concluded that selling health foods in school is useful for pupils health and overall imrovement. It is hoped that corresponding organizations pay attention pipils daily menu and ban selling junk foods in school.
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with the notion that nutrition
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is useful for young generation
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health
. This will
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pupils
never suffer from obesity and can take
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vitamis
for improving mentally and
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phisically
.

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,
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across obesity. For
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teenagers
suffer from overweight
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of eating junk
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foods
. It is
widely
argued that unhealthy
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have
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a lot of calory
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selling
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health
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instead
of junk
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in schools
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extra weight.

Secondly
,
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consist of
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a lot of
vitamins and minerals. For
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instanse
, statistical report revel that eating
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health
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food
such as milk, nut, fruit
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improve
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people
brain activity. 20% better than usual. It should
be noted
that such kind of
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food
provide with daily needs.

In summary,
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eating nutritious
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food
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pupils
global
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problem and
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their
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organizm
to take useful
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microelements
for improving mentally and
physically
. It can
be concluded
that
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selling
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health
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foods
in school is useful for
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pupils
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and
overall
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imrovement
. It
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that corresponding organizations pay attention
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daily menu and ban
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junk
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in school.
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IELTS essay Only health food should be sold in school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
236 words
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