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Online shopping is now replacing shopping in the store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Online shopping is now replacing shopping in the store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? PyxB
It is considered that to do shopping through online is getting much more popular than to do shopping in the store recently. This essay believes that it is favourable way to use online for shopping. Firstly, this essay will discuss its beneficial aspect on saving time and secondly, the advantages of being much more choices while shopping. On the one hand, buying goods or services via the internet can be beneficial because of plethora of choices. The number of shopping sites is increasing day by day in accordance with people’s needs. It has many advantages, because people can see many options of same clothes or other services at the same time. Comparing shopping mall, we can have rare problem on size and price of any clothing while doing online shopping. From this point of view, today online shoppers are increasing everywhere. For example, according to the 2020 survey among the people of America, it is possible to observe that global online shopping market size hit 300 million. On the other hand, to do online shopping is useful for people for the reason that they do not waste much time while doing it. Especially, during some difficult situations such as pandemic period people have chance to benefit the advantages of online shopping market. In this way, although they are in lockdown situation they solve this problem and buy most things what they want just for some minutes. The survey, entitled “COVID-19 and E-commerce”, examined how the pandemic has changed the way consumers use according to a survey of about 3, 700 consumers. In conclusion, I agree that being of online shopper has many essential advantages at present. So we can simultaneously overcome to waste of time and some problems on size and choice that we face when shopping in a store.
It
is considered
that to do
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shopping
through
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online
is getting much more popular than to do
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shopping
in the store recently. This essay believes that it is
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favourable
way to
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use
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online
for
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shopping
.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss its beneficial aspect on saving
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time
and
secondly
, the
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advantages
of being much more choices while shopping.

On the one hand, buying
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goods
or services via the internet can be beneficial
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because
of plethora of choices. The number of
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shopping
sites is increasing day by day in accordance with
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people’s
needs. It has
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many
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advantages
,
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because
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people
can
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see
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many
options of same clothes or other services at the same
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time
. Comparing
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shopping
mall, we can have rare problem on size and price of any clothing while doing
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online
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shopping
. From this point of view,
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today
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online
shoppers are increasing everywhere.
For example
, according to the 2020 survey among the
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people
of America, it is possible to observe that global
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online
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shopping
market size hit 300 million.

On the other hand
, to do
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online
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shopping
is useful for
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people
for the reason that they do not waste much
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time
while doing it.
Especially
, during
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some
difficult situations such as pandemic period
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people
have chance to benefit the
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advantages
of
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online
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shopping
market. In this way, although they are in lockdown situation they solve this problem and
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buy
most things what they want
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just
for
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some
minutes. The survey, entitled “COVID-19 and E-commerce”, examined how the pandemic has
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changed
the way consumers
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use
according to a survey of about 3, 700 consumers.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that being of
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online
shopper has
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many
essential
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advantages
at present.
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So
we can
simultaneously
overcome to waste of
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time
and
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some
problems on size and choice that we face when
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shopping
in a store.
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IELTS essay Online shopping is now replacing shopping in the store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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