Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

online shopping is becoming more common these day. what effect could this have onth

online shopping is becoming more common these day. what effect could this have onth QM9e3
Online shopping is increasingly common today. In my opinion, this will have a negative impact on the environment and will require multiple low-paying occupations. Online shopping will hurt the inhabit of the earth and consume a lot of fossil fuel in the atmosphere. In order to ship by ship around the world or around my countries will consume numerous oil. Take Amazon, for instance; this company must ship a million even a billion products every day so they will be sent for their customer by airplane, train, and even ship for everyone who orders them. Therefore, air contamination becomes worse, and we use oil that contributes to climate change. Consequently, cars and motorbikes are two of the biggest causes of climate change every year in my country and over the world. Online shopping will require tons of occupations with low - salaries jobs. Cost of the jobs that online companies don't need to have decent qualifications and experience to demonstrate for employee and finally that companies will bankrupt in the future because they don't have a high-level manager and intelligent worker. That is the truck driver; the workers who work at a warehouse and also manage will have a low level and don't gain deeper insight into how to invest and business booming. There will be more and more jb for people who earn a living with low-paying jobs every month of the year. Finally, many of the workers will be replaced with robots, and job marketing will change again and more booming. To summarise, online shopping clearly aid climate change and provides many poor jobs. However, I wanna wish government needs to regulate this industry strive to help the environment, and allow for a higher standard of living.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
is
increasingly
common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
. In my opinion, this will have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on the environment and will require multiple low-paying occupations.

Online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
will hurt
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'inhabit' is correct. If 'inhabit' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the inhabit
of the earth and consume
Possible agreement error. The noun fossil seems to be countable; consider using: "a lot of fossils".
a lot of fossil
fuel in the atmosphere. In order to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ship
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ship
around the world or around my countries will consume numerous oil. Take Amazon,
for instance
; this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ship
a million even a billion products every day
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
for their customer by airplane, train, and even
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ship
for everyone who orders them.
Therefore
, air contamination becomes worse, and we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
oil that contributes to climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
.
Consequently
, cars and motorbikes are two of the biggest causes of climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
every year in my country and over the world.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
will require tons of occupations with low
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
salaries
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
. Cost of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
don't need to have decent qualifications and experience to demonstrate for employee and
finally
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
will bankrupt in the future
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they don't have a high-level manager and intelligent worker.
That is
the truck driver; the workers who work at a warehouse and
also
manage will have a low level and don't gain deeper insight into how to invest and business booming. There will be more and more
Possible spelling mistake found.
jb
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who earn a living with low-paying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
every month of the year.
Finally
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the workers will
be replaced
with robots, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
marketing will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
again and more booming.

To
Possible spelling mistake. 'summarise' is British English.
summarise
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
clearly
aid climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
and provides
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
.
However
, I
The word 'wanna' is informal. Consider an alternative.
wanna
wish
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
needs to regulate this industry strive to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the environment, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
for a higher standard of living.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay online shopping is becoming more common these day. what effect could this have onth

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • online shopping is becoming more common these day. what effect could this have onth