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Do you agree or disagree the children spend time to internet

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I understand this subject that, child spend time to computer and they are passactive. i think condition of society is one reason. some people were land lorad ،when the children went to out home they knew their neighbors. they had security but people are tenant, we cant know that maybe they hurt to our children. other reason is that some mother were houswife and had time to spend with their children. but parent are business today. they are always at work, when they come back to home they are tired and have not energy to spend with children. child need to childhood so they spend time in network and chating withe other guys. I think condition society and family are two important reason. my suggestion is that we cant change society condition but we can set time of our work. for example set times for children and listen to their speech. when we go to home dont speake about work. and dont forget that we were children a pastime too.
I understand this subject that, child
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time
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computer and
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passactive
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were land
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children
went to out home they knew their neighbors.
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they
had security
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people
are tenant, we
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children
.
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other
reason is that
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some
mother were
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houswife
and had
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time
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spend
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children
.
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but
parent are business
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today
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they
are always at work, when they
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back to home they
are tired
and have not energy to
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children
.
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child
need to childhood
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they
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time
in network and
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chating
withe other guys. I
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condition society and family are two
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important
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my
suggestion is that we
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cant
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change
society condition
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we can set
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time
of our work.
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for
example set
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times
for
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children
and listen to their speech.
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when
we
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go to home
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dont
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speake
about work.
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and
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forget that we were
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children
a pastime too.

IELTS essay the children spend time to internet

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
170 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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