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One of the most conspicuous trends in the 21st century is the difficulty of keeping a life-work balance. Some people find it hard to manage their time to be successful and fully responsible at their workplace and at the same time spend quality time with their families. This is certainly a problem faced by many.

One of the most conspicuous trends in the 21st century is the difficulty of keeping a life-work balance. Some people find it hard to manage their time to be successful and fully responsible at their workplace and at the same time spend quality time with their families. This is certainly a problem faced by many. VBy7A
There is no doubt that in the highly competitive business environment, it is extremely difficult not to be competitive at work. Many workers are trying to survive and be successful and this forces them to spend more than eight hours per day at work. For example, an accountant not only uses to manage his responsibilities and duties but also does additional work. To manage that it is possible to limit employee’s responsibilities or share them with others. The next point that needs to be taken into consideration is that people should manage their responsibilities at home like washing, cleaning, ironing and also, communicate with other family members. To be able to do so, they must manage to not be overtired from their responsibilities at work. In this case, they will be able to spend quality time with their families and maintain their responsibilities. The competition at a workplace, increased population and our demand to do best in every sector is the main reason we are not being able to balance in our professional and personal life. The decreased family bonding and less time for socialising are two main reasons for this heinous trend. To tackle this we need to spend more time with our family members and contribute to household works. More time should be reserved for the dear and near one than spending those times in electronic devices. The value of family bonding should be taught from the early childhood and the parents should make examples through their works to teach children the importance of family value. To sum up, there are a lot of people who cannot successfully manage their responsibilities and keep work-home balance. I highly recommend people to limit their responsibilities or share them among other people or organisations as well as plan a timetable of time spend at work and at home.
There is no doubt that in the
highly
competitive business environment, it is
extremely
difficult not to be competitive at
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work
.
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Many
workers are trying to survive and be successful and this forces them to
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spend
more than eight hours per day at
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work
.
For example
, an accountant not
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only
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uses
to
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manage
his
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responsibilities
and duties
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but
also
does additional
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work
. To
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manage
that it is possible to limit employee’s
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responsibilities
or share them with others.

The
next
point that needs to
be taken
into consideration is that
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people
should
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manage
their
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responsibilities
at home like washing, cleaning, ironing and
also
, communicate with other
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family
members. To be able to do
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so
, they
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must
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manage
to not
be overtired
from their
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responsibilities
at
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work
.
In this case
, they will be able to
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spend
quality
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time
with their
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families
and maintain their responsibilities.

The competition at a workplace, increased population and our demand to do best in every sector is the main reason we are not being able to balance in our professional and personal life. The decreased
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family
bonding and less
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time
for
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socialising
are two main reasons for this heinous trend. To tackle this we need to
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spend
more
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time
with our
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family
members and contribute to household works. More
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time
should
be reserved
for the dear and near one than spending those
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times
in electronic devices. The value of
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family
bonding should
be taught
from the early childhood and the parents should
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make
examples through their works to teach children the importance of
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family
value.

To sum up, there are
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a lot of
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people
who cannot
successfully
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manage
their
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responsibilities
and
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keep
work-home balance. I
highly
recommend
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people
to limit their
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responsibilities
or share them among other
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people
or
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organisations
as well
as plan a timetable of
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time
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spend
at
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work
and at home.
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IELTS essay One of the most conspicuous trends in the 21st century is the difficulty of keeping a life-work balance. Some people find it hard to manage their time to be successful and fully responsible at their workplace and at the same time spend quality time with their families. This is certainly a problem faced by many.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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