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One of Forms at The following Which of Transportation to do you the Consider BE MOST enjoyable? The Bicycle Automobile Train Explain Why you Enjoy IT. v.1

One of Forms at The following Which of Transportation to do you the Consider BE MOST enjoyable? The Bicycle Automobile Train Explain Why you Enjoy IT. v. 1
People's opinions differ about the most effective way of curbing road accidents. While some opine that reduction of the optimum speed limit is the way forward, others think there are more effective methods to address the situation. In my opinion, I succumb to the fact that there are various ways of achieving safety on the highway. On the one hand, the reduced maximum speed limit is considered the most appropriate way of minimising road mishaps. That is to say, when there is a barrier to speed, drivers would not have a choice rather than to obey and this would in turn reduce the frequency at which they run into other vehicles, pedestrians or stationary objects. Invariably making the roads safer to tread. On the other hand, others believe there are more preferable ways and I agree with this. Firstly, the authorities should ensure that all drivers are lawfully licensed and offenders should be prosecuted appropriately. Since some accidents are due to amateur drivers plying the highways. Secondly, there should be a measure in place in monitoring the state of the vehicles and unqualified ones be withdrawn from the roads. This would not only minimize accidents, but all reduce health hazards due to the emissions from them. Lastly, long and heavy-duty vehicles should be restricted during peak periods. For instance, Lagos State has recorded a 78% reduction in road accidents since this law was enacted. Moreover, these vehicles have been known to be the cause of over 60% of these accidents. In conclusion, despite the various views of people about the best way to achieve safety on the roads, I believe that ensuring licensing of drivers, vehicle are in good conditions and restricting the movement of long vehicles will.
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. While
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opine that reduction of the optimum speed limit is the
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forward, others
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think
there are more effective methods to address the situation. In my opinion, I succumb to the fact that there are various
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ways
of achieving safety on the highway.

On the one hand, the
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reduced
maximum speed limit
is considered
the most appropriate
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minimising
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road
mishaps.
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to say, when there is a barrier to speed,
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drivers
would not have a choice
rather
than to obey and this would in turn
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reduce
the frequency at which they run into
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other
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vehicles
, pedestrians or stationary objects.
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making the
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roads
safer to tread.

On the
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other
hand, others believe there are more preferable
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ways
and I
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with this.
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, the authorities should ensure that all
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drivers
are
lawfully
licensed and offenders should
be prosecuted
appropriately
.
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are due to amateur
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plying the highways.
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, there should be a measure in place in monitoring the state of the
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vehicles
and unqualified ones be withdrawn from the
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roads
. This would not
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,
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all
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reduce
health hazards due to the emissions from them.
Lastly
, long and heavy-duty
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vehicles
should
be restricted
during peak periods.
For instance
, Lagos State has recorded a 78% reduction in
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road
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accidents
since this law
was enacted
.
Moreover
, these
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vehicles
have
been known
to be the cause of over 60% of these accidents.

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, despite the various views of
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people
about the best
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way
to achieve safety on the
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, I believe that ensuring licensing of
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drivers
,
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vehicle
are in
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good
conditions and restricting the movement of long
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will.
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IELTS essay One of Forms at The following Which of Transportation to do you the Consider BE MOST enjoyable? The Bicycle Automobile Train Explain Why you Enjoy IT. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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