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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really. interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the v.1

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really. interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the v. 1
Nowadays usage of cars has become increasingly popular as a symbol of the status quo. In order to control the usage these vehicles, others modes of transportation should be encouraged and governments should keep an eye on the ownership also. I definitely agree with the notion that the governments should not only make strict rules to control the usage of cars, but also run some awareness programs which encourages people to use public transportation. Every second of time is more valuable, so these days no one is in a position to waste the time just for waiting and transportation. This makes everyone to go on their own vehicle which is more reliable than any other modes of transportation. For example, in India the time taken to reach the agency village like Aruku from their district headquarters is almost 6 to 7 hours by means of public transport. Whereas it takes 3 to 4 hours, if they use their own vehicle. This makes them to own a car. Instead of buying a car for everyone, they can form a group and travel which reduces their expenditures. In addition to that the amount of pollution that are being released from every vehicle can be reduced. For instance, in china for every 10 people 9 are having their own cars which make huge traffic jams at traffic signals and the amount of pollution being released crosses the specified values. Finally, I completely agree that governments should organise programs to create awareness in the people towards the usage of public transportation and at the same time stringent rules must be formed to control the usage and ownership.
Nowadays
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usage
of
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cars
has become
increasingly
popular as a symbol of the status quo. In order to control the
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usage
these
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vehicles
, others modes of
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transportation
should
be encouraged
and
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governments
should
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keep
an eye on the ownership
also
. I definitely
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agree
with the notion that the
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governments
should not
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only
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make
strict
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rules
to control the
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usage
of
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cars
,
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but
also
run
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some
awareness programs which encourages
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people
to
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use
public transportation.

Every second of
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time
is more valuable,
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so
these days no one is in a position to waste the
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time
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just
for waiting and
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transportation
. This
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makes
everyone to go on their
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own
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vehicle
which is more reliable than any other modes of
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transportation
.
For example
, in India the
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time
taken to reach the agency village like
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Aruku
from their district headquarters is almost 6 to 7 hours by means of public transport. Whereas it takes 3 to 4 hours, if they
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use
their
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own
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vehicle
. This
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makes
them to
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own
a car.

Instead
of buying a
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car
for everyone, they can form a group and travel which
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reduces
their expenditures.
In addition
to that the amount of pollution that are
being released
from every
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vehicle
can be
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reduced
.
For instance
, in
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china
for every 10
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people
9 are having their
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own
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cars
which
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make
huge traffic jams at traffic signals and the amount of pollution
being released
crosses the specified values.

Finally
, I completely
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agree
that
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governments
should
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organise
programs to create awareness in the
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people
towards the
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usage
of public
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transportation
and at the same
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time
stringent
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rules
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must
be formed
to control the
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usage
and ownership.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really. interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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