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ONE game on a relatively old console

ONE game on a relatively old console 5L10V
Words are like toothpaste; they stick to people and are hard to put back into the tube. They are to be thoughtfully used. Once out of the container, it is hard to put the viscous substance back into the circular tube. No matter how much you scoop the paste off, there will always be residue sticking to another person that you cannot get back. Once it sticks, the memory can resurface back at any time, making it a potential source of regret. Birthdays are happy occasions, born of joy and celebration. However, there was one birthday where I gave myself said lesson on the realities of sticky words. This story begins around Late fall, in October of 2016. Like many kids back then, I would spend my time watching YouTube, sitting on a soft couch. I particularly liked watching people do walkthroughs of many console games. Notably, I like watching people playing the MegaMan X series. Of course, I did not just watch the gameplays just to only laze around and do nothing about it. I was incredibly determined to play Megaman X, so I did research. From the video description, I immediately know that the game runs on the PlayStation Portable, or PSP for short. Then, I checked a game store at my favorite mall to check if the game is in stock. It turns out that the game does not sell as discs anymore, but are now ported into the console itself for free. All of this was planned as more of a trophy showcasing my determination and hard work. I wanted to have the PSP hanging in room like a plaque showcasing my achievements. So, I just needed to save up enough pocket money for the console and I can play it with no regrets. My plan was set. I counted the total amount of money in my piggie bank and then subtracted it from the price goal. Then, I made my plan on the minimum amount I would save per day. I knew what I needed and what I had to do. However, there was one thing I did not account for in my plan at all: my subtlety. It was immediately obvious to my parents that I wanted the PSP very much, as almost every time I pass the game store at the mall, I would squish myself in front of the cold glass plane to take a good look to confirm that the console is still on sale. Keep in mind, this was around mid-October, only a couple weeks before my birthday. So, without me knowing, my parents know what they were going to get for my birthday present. My plan back then would have taken many months to garner enough cash for the game console, but in the end, it took only 4 weeks. When my birthday rolled around, I imagined them getting me at least like a big book that were about my interests like DC or Lego. I was surprised when I found the PSP that was plugged into a socket, charging up. I was overjoyed and grateful at them, but inside I felt a bit cheated. If I had been more careful with my words, I would not have wasted my parent’s money. Many people would argue that for their children, not a penny is counted as counted, but I felt like I did because I only wanted to play the PSP for only MegaMan X and it only. It was just ONE game on a relatively old console that were not getting any new games at all. So, on the day, internally, I promised myself to be more thoughtful and careful of the words poured out of my mouth, no different from the toothpaste lesson of the west. It is actually kind of funny. A lesson like you should be more careful with your words should be taught from parent to child, but there I was accidentally giving myself a life lesson. To save even the last bit of money, is my kind of life motto, to spare unnecessary expenses. So, it was that day that gave me a wider understanding of life.
Words are like toothpaste; they stick to
people
and are
hard
to put
back
into the tube. They are to be
thoughtfully
used
. Once out of the container, it is
hard
to put the viscous substance
back
into the circular tube. No matter how much you scoop the paste off, there will always be residue sticking to another person that you cannot
get
back
. Once it sticks, the memory can resurface
back
at any time, making it a potential source of regret. Birthdays are happy occasions, born of joy and celebration.
However
, there was one birthday where I gave myself said
lesson
on the realities of sticky words.

This story
begins
around
Late fall, in
October of 2016
. Like
many
kids
back
then, I would spend my time watching YouTube, sitting on a soft couch. I
particularly
liked watching
people
do walkthroughs of
many
console
games
.
Notably
, I like watching
people
playing the
MegaMan
X series.
Of course
, I did not
just
watch
the
gameplays
just
to
only
laze
around
and do nothing about it. I was
incredibly
determined to play
Megaman
X,
so
I did research. From the video description, I immediately know that the game runs on the PlayStation Portable, or PSP for short. Then, I
checked
a game store at my favorite mall to
check
if the game is in stock. It turns out that the game does not sell as discs anymore,
but
are
now
ported into the
console
itself for free. All of this
was planned
as more of a trophy showcasing my determination and
hard
work. I wanted to have the PSP hanging in room like a plaque showcasing my achievements.
So
, I
just
needed to save up
enough
pocket
money
for the
console
and I can play it with no regrets.

My
plan
was set
. I counted the total amount of
money
in my
piggie
bank and then subtracted it from the price goal. Then, I made my
plan
on the minimum amount I would save per day. I knew what I needed and what I had to do.
However
, there was one thing I did not account for in my
plan
at all: my subtlety. It was immediately obvious to my
parents
that I wanted the PSP
very
much, as almost every time I pass the game store at the mall, I would squish myself in front of the
cold
glass
plane
to take a
good
look to confirm that the
console
is
still
on sale.
Keep
in mind, this was
around
mid-October,
only
a
couple
weeks
before
my birthday.
So
, without me knowing, my
parents
know what they were going to
get
for my birthday present.

My
plan
back
then would have taken
many
months to garner
enough
cash for the game
console
,
but
in the
end
, it took
only
4 weeks. When my birthday rolled
around
, I imagined them getting me at least like a
big
book that were about my interests like DC or Lego. I
was surprised
when I found the PSP that
was plugged
into a socket, charging up. I
was overjoyed
and grateful at them,
but
inside I felt a bit cheated. If I had been more careful with my words, I would not have wasted my
parent’s
money
.
Many
people
would argue that for their children, not a penny
is counted
as counted,
but
I felt like I did
because
I
only
wanted to play the PSP for
only
MegaMan
X and it
only
. It was
just
ONE game on a
relatively
old
console
that were not getting any new
games
at all.
So
, on the day,
internally
, I promised myself to be more thoughtful and careful of the words poured out of my mouth, no
different
from the toothpaste
lesson
of the west.

It is actually kind of
funny
. A
lesson
like you should be more careful with your words should
be taught
from
parent
to child,
but
there I was
accidentally
giving myself a life
lesson
. To save even the last bit of
money
, is my kind of life motto, to spare unnecessary expenses.
So
, it was that day that gave me a wider understanding of life.
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IELTS essay ONE game on a relatively old console

Essay
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694 words
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