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Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's era, we all are aware of that intelligence and social skills are required. To increase this skills children have to go school. From the academic experience they will learn many things like how to interact with other, personal development and so on. In schools children learn not new methods but also learn advance technology. Teacher plays a significant role in students'life. Parents are also similar responsible for their children's life. To a large extent, I agree with the nation of teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. In this essay I will discuss reason to fulfil my statement. For student both teachers and parent are role model to enhance their creativity. In school children spend maximum 8 hours to study. Therefore, they are under the observation of mentors. Teachers can give ideas as well as motivation to do hardwork. There are several activities in schools that influence student. To an example, school organised a couple of sport activities which is out the curriculums such as crick
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more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. In this essay I will discuss reason to fulfil my statement.

For student both
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teachers
and parent are role model to enhance their creativity. In
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children spend maximum 8 hours to study.
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, they are under the observation of mentors.
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Teachers
can give
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ideas
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as motivation to do
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. There are several activities in
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schools
that influence student. To an example,
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a couple of sport activities which is out the curriculums such as
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IELTS essay Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
172 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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