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On the other hand, when we asked about the sources of monthly income, the results were as shown in Figure 2 below. We note that 60% of the residents work as freelancers, 7% receive assistance from relatives or friends, and 11% do not have any work. All this is due to the cumulative effects of the war for ten years, and the lack of recognition by countries of the liberated area, and thus the lack of investments Internal and external, residents' dependence on food aid, and lack of income make the residents of the area unable to build the camps' architectural growth, and waiting for humanitarian organizations to help restructure the existing shelters.

On the other hand, when we asked about the sources of monthly income, the results were as shown in Figure 2 below. We note that 60% of the residents work as freelancers, 7% receive assistance from relatives or friends, and 11% do not have any work. All this is due to the cumulative effects of the war for ten years, and the lack of recognition by countries of the liberated area, and thus the lack of investments Internal and external, residents' dependence on food aid, and lack of income make the residents of the area unable to build the camps' architectural growth, and waiting for humanitarian organizations to help restructure the existing shelters. MBw1a
On the other hand, when we asked about the sources of monthly income, the results were as shown in Figure 2 below. We note that 60% of the residents work as freelancers, 7% receive assistance from relatives or friends, and 11% do not have any work. All this is due to the cumulative effects of the war for ten years, and the lack of recognition by countries of the liberated area, and thus the lack of investments Internal and external, residents' dependence on food aid, and lack of income make the residents of the area unable to build the camps' architectural growth, and waiting for humanitarian organizations to help restructure the existing shelters.
On the other hand
, when we asked about the sources of monthly income, the results were as shown in Figure 2 below. We note that 60% of the residents work as freelancers, 7% receive assistance from relatives or friends, and 11% do not have any work. All this is due to the cumulative effects of the war for ten years, and the lack of recognition by countries of the liberated area, and
thus
the lack of investments Internal and external, residents' dependence on food aid, and lack of income
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make
the residents of the area unable to build the camps' architectural growth, and waiting for humanitarian organizations to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
restructure the existing shelters.
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IELTS essay On the other hand, when we asked about the sources of monthly income, the results were as shown in Figure 2 below. We note that 60% of the residents work as freelancers, 7% receive assistance from relatives or friends, and 11% do not have any work. All this is due to the cumulative effects of the war for ten years, and the lack of recognition by countries of the liberated area, and thus the lack of investments Internal and external, residents' dependence on food aid, and lack of income make the residents of the area unable to build the camps' architectural growth, and waiting for humanitarian organizations to help restructure the existing shelters.

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