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Addicts and drug addiction

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A strong and hasty mafia group was illegally buying and selling narcotics They think they have sympathized with the addicts by selling drugs And have soothed them But in principle they prompted humiliated the addicts It's like sprinkling salt on a scorch And intensify the tempest of their lives The Mafia group had caused thousands of people to become addicted, and addicts had made their lives dependent on their addiction.   They should have been encouraged and resume new life And be in harmony with it And refrain to use drugs.
A strong and hasty mafia group was
illegally
buying and selling narcotics They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
they have sympathized with the addicts by selling drugs And have soothed them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
in principle they prompted humiliated the addicts It's like sprinkling salt on a scorch And intensify the tempest of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
The Mafia group had caused thousands of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to become addicted, and addicts had made their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
dependent on their addiction.
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They should have
been encouraged
and resume new life And be in harmony with it And refrain to
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use
drugs.
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IELTS essay Addicts and drug addiction

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
91 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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