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⦁ Older people usually think that life used to be better in the past. Do you think they are right or wrong to think like that?

⦁ Older people usually think that life used to be better in the past. Do you think they are right or wrong to think like that? O6VMk
At the present period of time everyone is busy with their work, studies and daily life chores. it is believed by grey hair people that they had impressive life in past as compered to present and i also agree with their thinking. there are so many reasons behind this problem, which will be discussed in forthcoming paragraphs. To begin with the reasons of old people`s thinking about the past life was better than today`s life. first of all today`s people do not have much time for their grand parents, because of their tight working schedule, they work for multiple shifts to earn more and more money. after the work of many hours they feel tired and want some rest so they left with no time for their older ones. secondly the advance technology is also the cause behind it. because today`s generation spend most of their time on their phones, to watch videos, active on social media, to watch TV and to play video games. so they even don`t think about their older, how they feel? , how they spend their time? that`s why the older people think that past life was better because there was not so much work to do, everyone spent their time together instead of spending on phones because there was no high technology. further more this particular issue has another reasons, firstly in past everyone in a family lived together, ate together and work together without any problem but nowadays the families are divided because of their work, study and the hate for each other but their older ones remains lonely and they get hurt and feel so bad for this. the another reasons is decrease of love and affection for the orders. today`s individual hasn`t so much love for their parents or grand parents. as we read and hear so many news's about the children or grand children who throw their older out of their house or send them to the old age home. this is the worst thing which never happened in the past. for example a survey was conducted by "support older" named NGO in which they showed that 47% of old age peoples voted for not happy with their present life. in conclusion, i believe that there`s no doubt that past life was better than today`s life because today no one have much time for older because of their working schedule and giving more priority to technology, increment of hate, no more love for each other and for their old ones.
At the present period of
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time
everyone is busy with their
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work
, studies and daily
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life
chores.
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it
is believed
by
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grey
hair
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people
that they had impressive
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life
in
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past
as
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compered
to present and
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also
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agree
with their thinking.
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there
are
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reasons
behind this problem, which will
be discussed
in forthcoming paragraphs.

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with the
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reasons
of
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old
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people`s
thinking about the
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past
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life
was better than
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life
.
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first of all
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do not have
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much
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time
for their grand parents,
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because
of their tight working schedule, they
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work
for multiple shifts to earn more and more money.
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after
the
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work
of
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many
hours they feel tired and want
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some
rest
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so
they
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left
with no
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for their
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older
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ones
.
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secondly
the advance technology is
also
the cause behind it.
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because
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today`s
generation spend most of their
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time
on their phones, to
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watch
videos, active on social media, to
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watch
TV and to play video games.
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so
they even
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think
about their
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older
, how they feel?
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,
how they spend their
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time
?
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why the
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older
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people
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think
that
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past
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life
was better
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because
there was not
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so
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work
to do, everyone spent their
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time
together
instead
of spending on phones
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because
there was
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no
high technology.

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further
more this particular issue has another
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reasons
,
firstly
in
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past
everyone in a family
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lived
together, ate together and
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work
together without any problem
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but
nowadays the families
are divided
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because
of their
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work
, study and the hate for each other
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but
their
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older
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ones
remains
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lonely and
they
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get
hurt and feel
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so
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bad
for this.
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the
another
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reasons
is decrease of
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love
and affection for the orders.
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today`s
individual
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so
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love
for their parents or grand parents.
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as
we read and hear
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so
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many
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news's
about the children or grand children who throw their
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older
out of their
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house
or
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send
them to the
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old
age home.
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this
is the worst thing which never happened in the
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past
.
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for
example a survey
was conducted
by
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support older
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"
named NGO in which they
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showed
that 47% of
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old
age
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peoples
voted for not happy with their present life.

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in
conclusion,
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i
believe that there`s no doubt that
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past
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life
was better than
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today`s
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life
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because
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today
no one have
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much
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time
for
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older
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because
of their working schedule and giving more priority to technology, increment of hate, no more
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love
for each other and for their
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old
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ones
.
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IELTS essay ⦁ Older people usually think that life used to be better in the past. Do you think they are right or wrong to think like that?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
420 words
5.5
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