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Old-people’s home is popular accommodation for the retired and elderly folks in Britain.

Old-people’s home is popular accommodation for the retired and elderly folks in Britain. They are well-equipped with adequate facilities and specially trained nurses who cater to them. There is a growing discussion about who is responsible for the upkeep of these folks housed in the homes. While a number of people say it is the responsibility of their family, others argue that payment should be billed to the government. This essay will discuss why the families should be responsible for paying the bills incurred by the elderly folks in the nursing homes. Caring for an elderly parent can be physically demanding and emotionally draining to children. In most cases, these children are grown-up and have families of their own who require their immediate attention. Therefore, it becomes easier to send their aging parents to an old people’s home where they would not only be taken care of my trained nurses, but also have a community of age-appropriate peers. These services come at a huge cost and often times becomes a burden to the family especially in cases where the aged parent have chronic health conditions which require specialist care. For example, Alzheimer’s is one of the most common and most expensive diseases that old people have. Therefore, people expect that the government will step in and use the tax that they have contributed over the years to pay for their comfort in their old age.
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’s home is popular accommodation for the retired and elderly folks in Britain. They are well-equipped with adequate facilities and
specially
trained nurses who cater to them. There is a growing discussion about who is responsible for the upkeep of these folks housed in the homes. While a number of
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people
say it is the responsibility of their
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family
, others argue that payment should
be billed
to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
. This essay will discuss why the
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families
should be responsible for paying the bills incurred by the elderly folks in the nursing homes.

Caring for an elderly parent can be
physically
demanding and
emotionally
draining to children.
In most cases
, these children
are grown
-up and have
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families
of their
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own
who require their immediate attention.
Therefore
, it becomes easier to
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send
their aging parents to an
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old
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people’s
home where they would not
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only
be taken
care of my trained nurses,
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but
also
have a community of age-appropriate peers. These services
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come
at a huge cost and
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often
times becomes a burden to the
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family
especially
in cases where the aged parent have chronic health conditions which require specialist care.
For example
, Alzheimer’s is one of the most common and most expensive diseases that
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old
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people
have.
Therefore
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
will step in and
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use
the tax that they have contributed over the years to pay for their comfort in their
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old
age.
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IELTS essay Old-people’s home is popular accommodation for the retired and elderly folks in Britain.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
235 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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