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Old age people health and need to live a happy life vary with person to person. In these time we have all advance facility and manpower to do something good. In Britain, people get older often go the flag age home to live with other same age people with minor emergency medical facilities.

Old age people health and need to live a happy life vary with person to person. In these time we have all advance facility and manpower to do something good. In Britain, people get older often go the flag age home to live with other same age people with minor emergency medical facilities. XGRrw
Since it is a facility provided by government or semi - government organisation there are a lot of money needed to take care the old people. Government is liable for every citizen of their country. Mostly of people think all the financial burden should be bear by the government. But it's all depend on the tax system, like in Britain they have flat 40 % tax on the income with free medical access. Which is a very good step for everyone health care system. People who can afford them self-prefer to pay for their care and reason behind that mostly they can choose according to their budget and private facilities. Both the options are available for people. Government help unfortunate old age people who are unable to pay nor paid the taxes. To keep everyone equal and provide the old age home to live. But I think expenses of old age should be depends on the particular person condition. Like a person worked his/her life and paid all taxes fairly and work hard and with old age not able to support them self then government should pay for them. And if a person is not able to pay but family is able to support partially then both should have to contribute. There are NGO and social well fare organisation are raising money to support old age people who don't have family. Also some people sponsoring the individual person for old age.
Since it is a facility provided by
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government
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government
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organisation
there are
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a lot of
money needed to take care the
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old
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people
.
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Government
is liable for every citizen of their country.
Mostly
of
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people
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think
all the financial burden should be bear by the
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government
.
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But
it's all depend on the
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tax
system, like in Britain they have flat 40 %
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tax
on the income with free medical access. Which is a
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very
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good
step for everyone health care system.
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People
who can afford them self-prefer to
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pay
for their care and reason behind that
mostly
they can choose according to their budget and private facilities.

Both the options are available for
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people
.
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Government
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help
unfortunate
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old
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age
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people
who are unable to
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pay
nor paid the
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taxes
. To
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keep
everyone equal and provide the
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old
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age
home to
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live
.
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I
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think
expenses of
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old
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age
should be
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depends
on the particular
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person
condition. Like a
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person
worked his/her life and paid all
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taxes
fairly
and work
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hard
and with
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old
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age
not able to support them self then
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government
should
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pay
for them. And if a
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person
is not able to
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pay
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but
family is able to support
partially
then both should
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have to
contribute. There are
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NGO
and social well fare
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organisation
are raising money to support
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old
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age
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people
who don't have family.
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Also
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some
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people
sponsoring the individual
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person
for
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old
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age
.
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IELTS essay Old age people health and need to live a happy life vary with person to person. In these time we have all advance facility and manpower to do something good. In Britain, people get older often go the flag age home to live with other same age people with minor emergency medical facilities.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
241 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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