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Numerous individual are fond of eating unhealthy food although they are aware that it is not good for their health. This is because of the influence of advertisments and friend. These are the temptations that can be avoided to improve the eating habits of an individual.

Numerous individual are fond of eating unhealthy food although they are aware that it is not good for their health. This is because of the influence of advertisments and friend. These are the temptations that can be avoided to improve the eating habits of an individual. Ar10x
Numerous individual are fond of eating unhealthy food although they are aware that it is not good for their health. The main reason for this is temptation and in this essay, is will give some tips to improve their eating habit. Let me start by saying that temptations are coming from the advertisments of the food we oftem see on TV. They are presented in such a way that the one watching will water their mouth and will give a little try. For example, a diabetic person, who is not suppose to drink softdrinks, will take a little and will justify that a small amount won't hurt. As a result the small amount will tend tobe repeated and soon will be cause the high level of sugar in the blood. Another reason is the influence of friends, specially in social gathering. As friends eat together in a happy mode, they tend to forget the food that they ought not to eat because they were carried away by the friends around, eating common food. As a result, same thing will happen, to justify that small amount wont hurt. In this case, people from should realize that abuse in the consuming of unhealthy food will always cause problem to ones health. Therefore a limit of this kind of food should be observed, no matter how good they taste. In addition, always balance the intake with nutritious foods. Like for example, cakes can be replaced by fruits. This way, the person will not be deprived of wanting to eat when they crave for something sweet. I therefore conclude that the eating unhealthy food are often caused by temptations and by limiting the intake of such kind, the body will not get used to it. We, also, need to take food that are healthy in replace to unhealthy ones to make a good eating habit.
Numerous individual are fond of
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eating
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unhealthy
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food
although they are aware that it is not
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good
for their health. The main reason for this is temptation and in this essay, is will give
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some
tips to
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improve
their
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eating
habit.

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me
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start
by saying that temptations are coming from the
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advertisments
of the
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food
we
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oftem
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see
on TV. They
are presented
in such a way that the one watching will water their mouth and will give a
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little
try.
For example
, a diabetic person, who is not
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suppose
to drink
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softdrinks
, will take a
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little
and will justify that a
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small
amount won't hurt.
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the
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small
amount will tend
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repeated and
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soon
will
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be cause
the high level of sugar in the blood. Another reason is the influence of friends,
specially
in social gathering. As friends eat together
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in a happy mode
, they tend to forget the
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food
that they ought not to eat
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because
they
were carried
away by the friends around,
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eating
common
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food
.
As a result
, same thing will happen, to justify that
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small
amount
Please make sure you mean 'wont' (a habit), not "won't"/"won’t" (short for 'will not')?
wont
hurt.

In this case
,
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people
from should realize that abuse in the consuming of
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unhealthy
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food
will always cause problem to
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ones
health.
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Therefore
a limit of this kind of
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food
should
be observed
, no matter how
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good
they taste.
In addition
, always balance the intake with nutritious
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foods
. Like
for example
, cakes can
be replaced
by fruits. This way, the person will not
be deprived
of wanting to eat when they crave for something sweet.

I
therefore
conclude that the
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eating
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unhealthy
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food
are
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often
caused by temptations and by limiting the intake of such kind, the body will not
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get
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used
to it. We,
also
, need to take
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food
that are healthy in replace to
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unhealthy
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ones
to
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make
a
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good
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eating
habit.
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IELTS essay Numerous individual are fond of eating unhealthy food although they are aware that it is not good for their health. This is because of the influence of advertisments and friend. These are the temptations that can be avoided to improve the eating habits of an individual.

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