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Number of visitors in museum.

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Although from year 2000, Shenzhen museum had increased the number of visitors to 4% of visitors in 2015. Compared to about 5 % of visitors in the Vatican museum, and 4 % of visitors for both London and Shenzhen museums in 1980. Surprisingly, the number of visitors both in London and Shenzhen museums had decreased from 1990 to 2000. And the number of visitors in London science museum seemed to continue decrease to 2% of visitors from 2000 to 2015.
Although from year 2000, Shenzhen
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had increased the number of
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visitors
to 4% of
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in 2015.

Compared to about 5 % of
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in the Vatican
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museum
, and 4 % of
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visitors
for both London and Shenzhen
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museums
in 1980.
Surprisingly
, the number of
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visitors
both in London and Shenzhen
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museums
had decreased from 1990 to 2000. And the number of
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visitors
in London science
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museum
seemed to continue decrease to 2% of
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visitors
from 2000 to 2015.
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IELTS essay Number of visitors in museum.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
80 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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