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Nowdays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?

In basic days people are given to play on gadjets which are facing humans this century and demaging adults health. This essay will first suggest that, the biggest problem caused by this is having some illness, not only that the radiation getting out from computers puts the line on teens life. The foremost caused by tecknical resourses are the teens which are using this kind of sourse from young ages continiuing until now for more than 3-4 hours a day. Millions of people all over the world used to use it for lots of needs every day moreover some people sollute their career problems by phones, laptops, computers. . . . Health is one of the most basic of human needs in our time nonetheles if you pay attantion, after a long period of time using your mobile, you have seconds beeing sightless. It has caused to eyelights by duration of having mobile on hand. A solution to this problem would be to strengthen your psychology and lose your needs to it than make more supplementaries to real life by demostrating that you are life in Earth. Not only that, humans have yo create any govermental system to have used phones out of needson a limited time. To conclude, nurtured virtual life is wonderful however real world and a better lifestyle is perfect one than writing your name to death note forethmore one and all should have a rest sometimes if you want to save your self.
In basic days
people
are
given
to play on
gadjets
which are facing humans this century and
demaging
adults health. This essay will
first
suggest that, the biggest problem caused by this is having
some
illness, not
only
that the radiation getting out from computers puts the line on
teens
life
. The foremost caused by
tecknical
resourses
are the teens which are using this kind of
sourse
from young ages
continiuing
until
now
for more than 3-4 hours a day. Millions of
people
all over the world
used
to
use
it for lots of needs every day
moreover
some
people
sollute
their career problems by phones, laptops, computers.
.
.
.
Health is one of the most basic of human needs in our time
nonetheles
if you pay
attantion
, after a long period of time using your mobile, you have seconds
beeing
sightless. It has caused to
eyelights
by duration of having mobile on hand. A solution to this problem would be to strengthen your psychology and lose your needs to it than
make
more
supplementaries
to real
life
by
demostrating
that you are
life
in Earth. Not
only
that, humans have
yo
create any
govermental
system to have
used
phones out of
needson
a limited time.
To conclude
, nurtured virtual
life
is wonderful
however
real world and a better lifestyle is perfect one than writing your name to death note
forethmore
one and all should have a rest
sometimes
if you want to save your self.
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IELTS essay Nowdays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?

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