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Nowadays,Young people are more interested in popstar and celebrities.They are not keen on learning about a historical figure and their life.Why is this causes so and what can be done.

Nowadays, Young people are more interested in popstar and celebrities. They are not keen on learning about a historical figure and their life. Why is this causes so and what can be done. gA5L3
Recently, Adolescent have more interested in popstar and international celebrities rather than historical figure. Myriad causes could be attributed to this which include two causes such as using social media and not interested in history subject. In this fortify above mention causes and solutions with necessary illustration and logical argument before citing my fesible conclusion. The first and perhaps the most vital reason seems to be people are more using social media day by day. By this I mean that social media applications such as instragram and facbool see to celebrities life style. Moreover Social plateform provide movies and albums without any prejudice of languge. For example, In KGF movie, Actor Yash keeps long hair so some individuals keep long hair like him and they follow his tips. The second reason appears to be history is not interested subject for young people. This means that Young people are not interested to know about theie ancestors and the kings. For instance, In 2018, Less than two third students chhose history subject for national graduation examination. First, Goverment should promote history subject through movies on T. V. In brief, They should organise seminar about history homes. For example, Our bahubali film patronise to mahismati samrajya. Second, The media is taking an pivotal role in advertising them during the compition therefore individual start following them. In conclusion, If the aformentioned solutions are properly implemented, we can curve this problem to a great extent.
Recently, Adolescent have more
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popstar
and international celebrities
rather
than historical figure. Myriad causes could
be attributed
to this which include two causes such as using
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social
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media
and not
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interested
in
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history
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subject
. In this fortify above mention causes and solutions with necessary illustration and logical argument
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before
citing my
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fesible
conclusion. The
first
and perhaps the most vital reason seems to be
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people
are more using
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social
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media
day by day. By this I mean that
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social
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applications such as
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instragram
and
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facbool
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to celebrities life style.
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Social
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languge
.
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KGF
movie, Actor
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Yash
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keeps
long hair
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individuals
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long hair like
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him and
they follow his tips. The second reason appears to be
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history
is not
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interested
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subject
for young
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people
. This means that Young
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are not
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to know about
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ancestors and the kings.
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, In 2018, Less than two third students
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chhose
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history
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subject
for national graduation examination.
First
,
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Goverment
should promote
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history
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subject
through movies on T. V.
In brief
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organise
seminar about
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history
homes.
For example
, Our
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bahubali
film
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patronise
to
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mahismati
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samrajya
. Second, The
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is taking
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an
pivotal role in advertising them during the
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compition
therefore
individual
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start
following them.
In conclusion
, If the
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aformentioned
solutions are
properly
implemented, we can curve this problem to a great extent.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, Young people are more interested in popstar and celebrities. They are not keen on learning about a historical figure and their life. Why is this causes so and what can be done.

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